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Chains of Blue

I knew you
I never knew you
Seconds and minutes and hours
full stop.
Somehow one night bound in my mind
from a freshman gaze these eyes remain
an ever-changing blue
capturing each hazy ray of past experience
bound in the books superfluous of words
If there was one that was meant to be
Only one that could captivate and burn my veins
then surely worlds would rearrange
and here you'd be
as if I knew you,
but I never knew you.

I loved you
I never loved you
Seconds and minutes and hours
full stop.
Somehow this line drawn-out in time
from a striking pain found in the clutching hand
a redundant chain of blue
convincing the mind in each present mode
bound in the matrix of twisted mental wires
If there was one that was meant to be
Only one more second to further pull these strings
then surely this world would rearrange
but here I'd be
as if I could love,
but I never loved.

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Each stanza takes place at a different point of time.

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  • sassykitty
    May 26, 2008

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    this is great! thanks for sharing, i really love the way you write in this particular form, and the way you use the contrasts to communicate your emotions. the imagery is extremely effective and i admire the way you connect this with the title. some of the metaphorical language, eg 'the matrix of twisted mental wires' are so powerful and imaginative. this is definitely one of the most striking poems i've read in a while - great write. good luck in the contest - cheers, it's so cheering to know there are so many talented writers out there.


  • Satans Advocate
    December 3, 2007
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    excellent

    very graphic, and yet relaxing. hope to see more in the future. Satans Advocate


  • glued-to
    November 22, 2007

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    are you contrasted and comparing your differnet fixations on people in different points in your life and commenting on how this 'chain of blue' seems to follow y ou around because it chains you to these feelings that you can't escape that always end in your sadness?


  • xitsthechokinkindx
    November 19, 2007
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    i dont understand the chain of blue but i like how you've contradicted the 'i knew you' with 'i never knew you' and 'i loved you' with 'i never loved you'....nice job :]

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