Stop the corny pick up lines
And give me someone to go with
Try a little harder, and make me smile
And give me time to make up my uncertain mind
Don’t expect me to leave you, and accept that I love you
Let me be your very last standing woman
And buy me a balloon that won’t pop
Give me a never ending Friday the fourteenth
And let me wear my stiletto heels
And piggy back me when they hurt
Let me feel like I can break when you let me go
Tell me you love unshaven legs, and compliment my hair
Try to be quiet when I try to speak
And listen to me when I don’t
Feed me with dark chocolates
Give me your problems, Ill take them away
Don’t ask me to dinner tonight, ask me to never stay a night away
Never stop finding me, and
Teach me the things of life
Teach me the things of love
Author notes
Option 2 - Daizy21
A contest entry
- I LOVE YOU by Page Deleted..
600 points, ended November 19, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - AP Family by Theory Of The Lost.
390 points, ended January 18, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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As I said before this is a beautiful poem of hope and full of meaning and reasoning. I loved the fact that you don't expect the material things but that you are looking for the more "spiritual" (if i can call it that) in the person. Powerfull write!
Hugz
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Very intersting.. I like your approach in this write. Nice to see someone looking for a person with real heart and soul as opposed to what someone can give them material wise. I like the dinner line, very clever. However, I doubt you'll ever find a guy who will tell you he LOVES unshaven legs: he may tolerate them temporarily, but love? The balloon line and Friday the 14th lines are also excellent.
PS - in the line starting Give me your problems, Ill should be I'll (missing apostrophe).
Excellent write.
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amazing!
This was simple wonderful! i loved this so much! i read it throughout and couldn't stop grinning! i loved this poem throughout! and the words used in this were simple awesome!
The tittle was attractive! great job! and best of luck in the contest!
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Thank you so much for your kind words!And thank you for reading my work!
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A great write! I did notice some spelling errors and some words used in the wrong contexts though.
except = accept
heals = heels
complement = compliment
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I LOVE I LOVE I LOVE!!!! This is stunning my darling! Great work on this one! Keep it up.... and PS: I wish I could say the same....
Hugz
Himler
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I love the way you approached this one.
Try to be quiet when I try to speak
And listen to me when I don’t
Feed me with dark chocolates
Give me your problems, Ill take them away
If you find a man like that let me know and I'll share the dark chocolate with you...I love dark chocolate. Best wishes in the contest.
Margaret
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very good write. i really like how you have your own way of wording this. good luck in the contest.
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that was very good! it was different and i liked the way you worded yourself here. good luck in the contest!
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