Kissing
Fucking
Making each other drip with cum.
The way she carresed my body with her soft sensual hands
made me quiver and drip with uncontrollable pleasure.
The way she made me give in to her demands
waiting to taste each others treasure.
The way she handcuffed me to the bed
so she could have me any way that she wanted.
The things she did after my legs were spread
and with her tongue,the way that she taunted me.
She drove me crazy,my legs were shaking with no control
bringing me to let my juices flow,which she lapped up with ease.
She teased me wildly,so there was no self-control
she knew exactly how to please a woman with such expertise.
I did the same making her drip with her sweet cream
The moans woke the neighbors,who were now listening at the door.
Most wanted to come in after they heard the pleasurable screams
We ignored them and for the rest of the night or pleasures we explored.
Author notes
something new to me,wanted to see if i could so let me know how i did.
A contest entry
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What did you think
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I found this quite amusing in parts but not exactly laugh out loud. I am puzzled about why you chose to enter an allegedly seriously erotic poem in a contest clearly marked "funny".....................!!!
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I'd have to say it's hot for a first time ~ Personally I'd like a little more Metaphors, imagery or Romance to it ~ instead I feel like I got the "Wham Bam ~ Thank ya mame" such as:
Her chocolate hair danced to the rhythm of our hearts,
as glitters of light graced the softness of her face.
With every stoke sent my feelings off the chart,
sending me to a world far from this place.
I still put everything you had in your write ~ Your write is still hot ~ I rather enjoyed reading it ~ try imagining it actually happening .... is there music? do you hear anything along with the moans... Maybe her breathe heaves .... Think of your senses...
I guess if your going to attempt erotica ~ I would think you'd go for the sense & Sensations of making love...
Still fabalouso write ~
Hope my 2 cents helps ... I did enjoy reading it ~
Thanks for entering my "Set the Bar" Contest ~ Good luck
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I agree with T.S. you did a wonderful job with this...keep 'em comin!
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I would say for your first effort at this, you done a great job on the poem and your partner!!
Well done keep up the good work.
All the best,
~T.S~
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hahahaha. i hope that isn't true that's hilarious! hahaaha. nice write.
please inform me what is cum? i feel stupid! -
HLA
handcuffed nice. ok that was hot. i enjoyed reading this one. well more than once. very nicely done. 
great yeah well i need to take care of something on that note. the lines:
The moans woke the neighbors,who were now listening at the door.
Most wanted to come in after they heard the pleasurable screams
They just wrapped the poem up nicely. Thanks for the read keep it up.
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This is really good, especially as it is a first write on this subject. Damn, wouldn't just have been the neighbours listening at the door if I was around lol.
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G'Day Razorsedge
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Very hot write you have penned; much more than what I was hoping for with this pic
Yummmy yummmmy
Thank you for your entry
Best of luck
Stay safe
~Amanda
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Hope this is better for you
have fun !
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