Amber glow surrounded by breathtaking petals
Frolicking in the breeze of a natures storm
Rain damped with earthly tears of joy
Like pirouetting souls dancing upon the clouds
Flowing colors illuminate together
Appearing amongst the grayish heavens
Tiny pigments of hue reflect the petals
The miracles of a rebirth flourishing the flowers
Amber glow surrounded by breathtaking petals
Author notes
Prompt; Pirouetting Petals
Words 59
Picture by N.Shapiro
A contest entry
- PIF by Virgoan.
400 points, ended November 19, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful imagery... dazzling descriptions. Vividly written, and for a prompt, this is impressive. Staying within a word count is hard, and this has been done wonderfully. Excellent job, and congrats on the HM.
Thanks for sharing!
M a r l u x i a
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I think that much of this poem is very lovely. It is sweet, soothing, and very expressive. I would love to see you revise "Flowing colors of the rainbow" a bit. Keep the thought of the rainbows flowing colors just use words with a smoother tone to them. It seems to be the only thing causing a break in this lovely piece of poetry
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Thanks for the comments I to have reviewed that line over and over again. This is what I came up with thanks for the again all comments well appreciated. Flowing colors illuminate together
LISA
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This is a wonderfully written poem, the use of repitition was effective in bringing the reader back to the real world
... I love the swaying if your words - in them I can see the dancing... this poem was certainly deserving of a trophy
Keep writing
Polly -
Wonderful! I like this piece
Thanks for sharinf and keep writing.
VIRGOAN
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*SIGH*
*sigh* Oh, how I wish spring were here. that's what I thought of when i read this one. Nice work.
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Beautiful expression on this prompt! I found this to be soothing for some reason.
Great write my dear sweet sis,
Love,
~Lisa~
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