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Don't Move

watching everyone as they pass
muttering and giggling shaking in rage
as you did this to me for years growling
under my breath wishing that you would stop

Wishing no would do this to me anymore
feeling the pressure of the gun in my pocket
as i reach into the pocket
feeling the cold of the metal

reaching my foot out and tripping a cheerleader
her boyfriend catching her and looking at me
giving me a look of disgust like i was dirt
pullng out the gun and pointing it at them

Staring down the sight pointing it at the
center of the evil varsity letter
whispering"Don't Move" while it seems louder to
them and me with their eyes wide before

The trigger is pulled and all the sound comes back
the cheerleader is dead as the blood trails down
the middle of her uniform staining it with crimson liquid
the football player trying to save her as another bullet
is shot and he loses his head falling to the ground
as others die a hand grips my arms as i point
it up to my chin and blowing my own head off

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just some thoughts for the contest

A contest entry

what do you think of it i think i maybe should change it

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  • xKrissyxGirl1x
    October 24
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    I love it, especially the ending. It is written amazingly and it totally enpowering for me.

  • tigress3737
    November 17, 2007

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    This is a little too morbid for my taste, excessively so. You most certainly took an interesting twist on the prompt. Thanks for entering