this is because of you,
i feel all this pain,
i hope you too,
feel like i do.
this is because of you,
i wish it would end.
all because of you,
i am going boo hoo.
it is because of you,
i will never walk hand in hand
ever again
.... it is all because of you....
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Written October 21st, 2003
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see, told you id get to commenting! i never lie, and keeping with that here's my comment--hey, i rymed (sorta)! lol--- i found the emotion in this very refreshing and very clear and familiar, i like that in a poem, a way to connect to it. the rymeing was great, untill the bit with the boo hoo and then it seemed forced, but heck one line isent going to ruin a poem such as this! i also like how this wasent drawn out or boreing, just to the point. i must admit that i too am guilty of drawn out poetry sometimes, but this was a nice change for me! THANKS! -cat-
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Great poem
Man, you're on fire! You got it in ya, buddy! Love all your poems. Kepp it up! Thats the kinda poetry I wanna write, cuz I really like it. -
I relate with you so much on that. Keep channling your emotions into wonderful poetry like this!
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Great job! Keep writing!
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So how many mr.wrongs to find mr.right? We learn from each relationship
to another we raise our bars a little bit into the next relationship . At least you know how you want to be treated and what you want out a relationship .
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