Mourn by C J Weatherholt at All poetry

Mourn the loss
      Of everything you knew
Everyone and everything you are
         Lose yourself
In his grief
        "I can't leave"
Keep telling yourself that
         Make it O.K.
Smile through your tears
    Live through the pain
                                                                                ~~Can you live with guilt?~~

Would it have been differently?
~~Headaches~~
Comfort in that resort

Remember that voice
Remember that time

Mourn your loss
          ~~I live with mine~~
          Split personas
In one soul
          ~~Love what's lost~~
But comfort in the now

Remember who you were?
Remember that passion?

~~Why has it abandon you?~~
Or did you move on
to something new?

The shinny things

That blind your eyes
Tell something else
Tell her she's a lie
Tell her not to hurt

It needed to be this way

Part's ripped in two
That belonged
Year's are not enough
Soul's are at a loss

Mourn for them...

Mourn for what they were...

Mourn for her

Author notes

It's format is a little different, but none the less I am happy with it since I have not written anything as of late... yes this is about me....

A contest entry

Invite Only; Me on Their List by Ted E Bare. 300 points, ended January 3, 2008, 79 entries
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Junkyard
May 17, 2009
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fuckin great sorry had to put it that way
Ted E Bare
January 2, 2008

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The format was different! I still feel like you were able to get your point across. I know I took it that pain exists within ones' life as the heart aches for relief. I want to thank you for entering my "Invite Only; Me On Their List" contest.

Ted E

PS: Once I have commented on all of your entries, then I will reread them all and choose the one that will be brought forward for being selected as Gold, Silver, Bronze or HM.
jcat
November 27, 2007
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It's format was indeed very different and kinda lost me... not sure how it was to be read... But I loved that you were so creative with it and that you took that risk!! It has great content within itself and I did enjoy it!! Thank you for showing me a new way to express your poetry!!
- C J Weatherholt
  December 11, 2007
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  Thanks for reading it. If you go to the bottom where you leave comments you can number the lines and that might help in the read. When I write like this I usually intend it to be confusing, because that is kind of the emotion behind it. Confusion, sorrow, guilt. Thanks again or reading it!
ZoeAsh1117
November 27, 2007

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i thought that this poem is very creative, i especially like the line "can you live with guilt", that was very real, very painful, it shows me that the person that is writing these feelings, emotions, are really hurt and had finally found a way to express the pain that was in some way delivered. very good keep it up!!!
Eruvande Almare
November 27, 2007

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Somber and Rich
Hmmmmn I liked the wording very much, the way you did it was unique, but I guess I'm just not used to it. I had to concentrate a little and re-read to get the message. But you portrayed your message beautifully and your wording is classic and smooth. Excellent phrasing and the picture goes well with what you're saying. Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work!

~Elizabeth~
Swan song
November 18, 2007
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This is unusual and awesome. The way you did this was excellent Well done