who shall pull out the sword in the stone
this heart of mine turned bitter, cold
I give myself to you freely
yet I still turn away
I fear, I hate
and yet still I love
No! I am not a fool!
I won't fall in love again!
you can't break me
you can't crush me
my soul is not to be controled
he destroyed me
he ravaged me
he left me here alone
to raise a child
all on my own
he tore apart my heart
he knew what he was doing
so I replaced my heart with stone
a sword pierced through the center
I dare you to try
I know you'll surrender
smiling, you embrace me
and take my son as your own
with your tender kiss I see
you took the sword from the stone
Author notes
prompt:
Heart of stone
"I give to you this heart of mine
try to break it if you must
but know this, My heart is like
a stone."
~ Trenchcoat Desires
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Comments
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This is lovely, and I think you write of what has become an all too common experience in America. I know some people whose hearts have ossified as a result of unhappy experiences.Well done!
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wow.. up til the ending this was exactly how i felt. and by ending i mean finding love again and the having a child part. you had everything perfectly. i loved this write so much.
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Aww yes thats seperated beautifully hun x
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thanks for the imput by the way! it really does look better. always glad to have some helpful and generous hints as to which to make my artwork look better. thanks again, my dear! you're a great friend and helper
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Mystical, thoughtful and kind of quest like. Interesting.
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another nice comment by you that is very much appreciated. thanks for reading and glad you enjoyed it again. I really like this comment...it's my favorite comment of yours.
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This was awesome I really liked the title also ^_^
Thank you so much for entering my contest and
Good luck!
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thanks for the comment and glad you liked the title!
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I can definitly feel your pain amongst this write awesome at your imagery and the only suggestion that Id make is to seperate the whole poem maybe twice...give the reader a pause for a second and it makes the words sink in better...just a thought.. other than that I liked this, your pain speaks loudly xx
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such a wonderful comment you give and i may take your suggestion. feel free to check on it later or i could just let you know when i do so.
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so much pain it
how did you beard it
its just too much
sufferers, sadness
alot to recall, you did really touching work here
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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thank you for your comment. I'm so glad that my piece touched you and you felt all the pain and sadness. I hope you also felt a bit of it being lifted at the end.
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Nice work
A nice write on an all too common problem in our society. Happy ending though
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thanks for the comment! glad you liked it! once in awhile it's good to have some happy endings.
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Very well written.
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thanks as always for reading my work! and thanks for the comment!
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I like the use of the sword in the stone, it creates good imagery.
I also like that there's a beginning, middle and end. It creates a story in itself and it's a good write.
ITNC
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thank you for the comment! I'm glad that you felt that way about my poem and enjoyed it! thanks again, and I hope to hear more from you! I added you as a fav so I will be returning the favor soon.
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This poem is beautiful! Great job!
Nice you found someone who could take the pain away.
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thanks for the comment! he takes my pain away, but he's still a pain in my butt sometimes....just like any couples go through.
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What a marvelous thought process went into this, the sword and teh stone and a stone hearty. You have the heart of a romantic as evidenced here and used it well within this work. Kudos,
Evan
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i always look forward to hearing your sweet and sincere comments...thanks for everything.
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interesting poem , I hope mike likes it.
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