i walk along those tracks.
glancing down every once in a while
to see that they have not disappeared again
i must make sure that they are not broken or cracked
as they usually are in life
many people shy away from them,
saying that they are unsafe.
are they unsafe?
i feel fine.
some people say that they are just there to guide the train
well? where else would the train go?
they are trampled on, taken for granted, and what else are they good for?
really, they're just piles of wood and metal.
just piles of meaningless words.
but that's not how i see them
i see them as one of the most important things in life
what would happen if the train suddenly derailed?
what would happen if those tracks just-vanished?
i've seen it happen. people get hurt. people get killed.
and people like me suffer still
i toe the edge of the right side of the track.
dare i leave it again?
for now, i'm comfortable on the tracks
as i would like them to be always-
whole, unbroken and clean.
but then again-the truth is not always what it seems.
A contest entry
- The Truth Is Out There… by BluRosePoet8488.
1000 points, ended December 5, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything Goes (Almost Anything) by Carly Pop.
500 points, ended December 15, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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excellent
this was a thought provoking, very well written poem that had excellent imagery. thank you for entering -
I know you can do it if you want to but personally, I like “I” rather than “i”.
The poem is good. The ‘beaten path’ is there so we can see what sort of
success others had going that way. It can save you a lot of time and
trouble but a lot of us have to go off in our own direction. Even if it
didn’t work the first time. Good work.
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Wow.
This is so creative! I love the imagery of someone walking along traintracks, going nowhere in particular. This is truly great.
Great Job.
-Snow
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Ooooo... Now this I like! Very well done. 'But then again-the truth is not always what it seems.' I like that line. It says alot about our lives and sums up this poem very nicely.
I like the analogy that you use between the tracks and the tracks of our lives. Well done. Keep the ink flowing and good luck. You've gotten a good start in writing poetry with this one.
~Donna~
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