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And that was it

Expectations
leaping upon uncultivated cotton ~
peeled skin
humid and green

you breathe
I sigh

stealing the moment
concise and transparent.

The big hand
barely propels;

miscarriage of presumption
bleeds...

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    November 16, 2007
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    i love that ending but the beginning didn't wow me as much.