She clicks her tongue
my eyes well up
She tells the judge
my heart sinks down
Daddy is now alone
my home is broken
I can't tell her
he was a good daddy all along
Author notes
35 words
A contest entry
- psst..i have a secret by Suzanne Dia.
450 points, ended November 19, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Good poem, but it doesn't seem like one, more like
a story or something. Actually I did read the rules, and for some reason, the descprtion and rules said, to me, appology. -
Sadly
The break up in homes affect he young so much more then Moms or Dads.. hang in there
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succinct and precise writing
well done
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Thank you much
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that last line is rough, it cuts, really.
heavy secret to carry around, if you ask me
hope writing helped (if it's your secret)
oh
and
thanks for entering
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