I always wondered
if my happiness
could glow in the dark
so I close my eyes
and wait for light.
Foolish fumbles of
a fervent ideal, I
thought happy endings
were held in her smile,
but no, not her.
Author notes
10 lines, Prompt: Not Her
Not happy with the title, but couldn't think of anything....It always seems to be the hardest part for me.
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- ~* PIF Phrase Prompt*~ by TwilightDazzles.
525 points, ended November 16, 2007, 10 entries
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Comments
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Well this is great too! Again, the imagery is outstanding - especially since you managed to get that into ten lines
the alliteration is a nice touch of detail
Thanks for this entry as well!
Leander -
I understand the frustration of coming up with a title but I do like yours. This is a great take on the prompt, thank you for your entry and I wish you the best in the contest
p.s.- remember not to reply to or rate my comment
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