Every part of me
exposed-
my tuxedo
my bare feet
my tired head
I feel quite
like an exhibitionist
revealed
for the crowd's enjoyment
I feel foolish
getting dressed
Author notes
29 words
A contest entry
- brevity by Melissa Gayle.
5500 points, ended November 25, 2007, 21 entries
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i did like this but it sits on the cusp for me, not sure which way i want it to go.
i think it was the ending that i didn't like as much -
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I was fighting over that myself. I didn't really like that last stanza but I thought the poem needed it to tie everything together. I think you're right and I should've left it off. Mind if I edit?
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