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It’s Not Her



Looking from a far, I’m convinced it’s Cindy
The way she walks, with her long black hair
follows in the wind, It is her, she has a red dress
Just like that, I can tell it's her with my eyes close

She crossing the road, the light is green again
Cindy wait, it’s me, she on her cellelar phone
She can’t hear me, common light change please
Hey it’s a red light, can’t you see I’m crossing

Cindy wait it’s me, as I tap her shoulder, as she
Turns, to my surprise, oh my God  It’s not her

 

 

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It's not her

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  • Sign of the Swine
    December 8, 2007
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    I love this concept because this has happened to me too many times. Nicely written.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    December 2, 2007

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    It happens far too often

    Almost like the man in the grocery store not paying atention to his wife and he wraps his arm around the wrong person .HELLO

  • celadia
    November 30, 2007
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    I thought this was a competent piece and I felt sorry for you that you made this mistake.


  • Nature Song silver member
    November 30, 2007

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    Congrad's on the HM. "It's not her" in this contest. The anticipation of waiting for a light to change thinking of someone you love so dear, only for it not to be her! Sad! ~Sie


  • rose petal desires
    November 29, 2007
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    nice Mar its
    a experience once siezed from me at a present time
    congrads on your cup


  • kennethlaney
    November 29, 2007
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    Very good

    Been there, then I feel kinda foolish. Funny when you chase ghost of love.


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    November 28, 2007
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    Haven't we all experienced this?...I know I did...Thinking you see someone you know, knew...a friend, a lover....
    So you wanna see them...for real or not...and not only in your dreams but in real life too...

    You made the prompt come alife....

    Congrats on the trophy


  • captain howdy
    November 24, 2007

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    Grats on your HM. When you miss someone enough, you bring them back in everyone else. This was lovely


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    November 18, 2007
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    great take on the prompt dear brother
    congrats on the HM, well deserved.

    Tasha


  • sonik
    November 18, 2007
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    wow, it has some speed....i was thinking that car will drive her over, but you made it better ;-)


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    November 16, 2007

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    Very, very good.
    I was starting to think it was Cindy myself.
    You made it seem so real.
    Excellent job...

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce


  • TwilightDazzles
    November 16, 2007
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    Haha, I think we have all been there. I have actually walked up and put my arm around someone that I thought was my friend...boy you cannot imagine the look I got lol. A great take on the prompt, thank you for your entry and I wish you the best in the contest

    p.s- remember not to respond to or rate my comment

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