A glance, a subtle meeting of eyes...
Then a look of recognition comes over each of them
It's him, the one she was hoping to see
It's her, the angel from the keyboard
Even more beautiful in person, he thought
Even more outgoing and sure of himself than she realized
Her eyes, becomming more piercing with each jaw dropping stare
Him, the one she never expected to go for her
A girl... the girl he wants
A boy... the boy behind the counter
Her swaying locks of brunette beauty
His backwards cap and quirky smile
He wants to be with her
She needs to be with him
Her...
Him...
Together...
Not her, not him
But they would be bliss
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Wonderful. I am sure many out there can relate to this.
Thanks for sharing.
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Liked the repetition of her and him throughout the poem and the final outcome works well here. Think we can relate to this at sometime in our life.
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9pts...
Thank you for this wonderful contribution to The Poetic Bandits reading list
~Lilac
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this is such a cute love story!
i love several of your unique phrases in here, like "the angel behind the keyboard."
i love how you have both of their points of views, because it makes the poem so lovely and so interesting.
LXF
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Interesting. The angel behind the keyboard. At first I thought it was about online love, but then I wasn't sure. Cute last line.
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The last lines of this poem are simply remarkable... I love how you have written this... the contrast between the him and her lines really add to the overall picture... a beautiful poem... I really enjoyed the emotion behind this write
Keep writing
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Such a young and beautiful love for sure. Your images of the lovers finding each other was so wonderful. Your words wer eright on the money here. Great work poet.
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This is such a sweet poem. I love how you described that unexpected moment when they came face to face with each other for the first time, how you left just enough unresolved at the end to tantalize the reader into imagining his or her own ending to their story.
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Awww adorable So perfectly put together and expressed so beautifuly!
The last very short lines are intensely captivating!!!
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nice wireting,very deep and real,hope they get what they both want.
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A beautiful poem of convergence, the initial meeting with hopes and dreams realized in that moment. Well written dual perspective poem my Bandit friend.
Dennis
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simply beautiful
its sweet and straight forward i like it
you have talent so dont waste it EVER
randomness husah!!!
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I just love the setup that you have in this poem and the closing couplet is especially precious... thank you for sharing this with us
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This is really nicely written and idealistic. We all like to think love will turn out like this. For some it does, for many it doesn't. It doesn't work out for me.
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a nicely written piece of work! My fav lines....
Her...
Him...
Together...
Not her, not him
But they would be bliss
The emotions portrayed well!!!
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