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Flight

lay slain, my muse
on brittle paths of maimed bark
and weave your final masterpiece
upon crippled backs of slaughtered words
floating quietly into the breeze
like butterflies taking flight

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30 words. First quickie.

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  • pavel silver member
    December 30, 2007
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    exquisite

    Not even sure I understand it,
    but the imagery is totally vivid for me.


  • debilynn gold member
    December 10, 2007

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    great write. clear message. superb imagery. thank you for sharing this. keep writing! God bless you always


  • mysticstorm gold member
    November 17, 2007

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    Very nice! Well done for a first quickie...you found great power in brevity.
    Wonderful metaphor and flow.
    Creative and smooth.

    Thank you for entering!
    mystic


  • crimsondew
    November 16, 2007
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    Wonderful

    Excellent opener for your quickies...Love the imagery here...keeps you wondering!
    All the best!


  • Tam
    November 16, 2007

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    oohhh...I like this!!

    very well done!
    I love your vivid imagery...

    brittle paths of maimed bark

    intense write and excellent for the brevity!

    great job!

    Blessings! Tammy

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