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It is all
angle and web—
we must stand perfectly
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the winter
will make us- - hungry
and like spiders
we will perish in the light
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spring
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Author notes
28 words
A contest entry
- brevity by Melissa Gayle.
5500 points, ended November 25, 2007, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Abstract beauty!
I love short poems, that leave some (or a lot) to the reader. Too bad some of us has cobwebs in the brain. Gongratulations on Honorable winner trophy in the contest! You have my applause, at least! Jim
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Great title to go with this strong short poem.
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I love this, congrats!
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Just rereading pieces - I really love the ending of this, it is what cinched it.
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Love the nuances here. The lack of verbosity makes this work spin its own web, and my oh my is it skillfully woven. Excellent! The best to you in the contest.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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This is an excellent piece... the last part was by far the strongest. It gave me the visual of a spider crumpling and dying at the dawn of a day. Overall just a wonderful short piece
-cassidy
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pure pure excellence. awesome. title, the whole poem, every word. wow.
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concise yes, but so much more
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perfect.
I'm so glad you're back.
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i liked this a lot. a well appreciated work. it reminds of the beginning stanza in 'the wasteland' by t.s. eliot.great poem!
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extremely well written and clearly makes your point so succinctly with a wonderful underlying imagery. great title, too.
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I'd say this is concise
really hits on the subject
in a way that aches, really
never thought of it before, but i do suppose a mirror could be just as bad as a spider web any day.
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A mirror is just as trapping..
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more really
got bug spray for spiders -
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This is so far beyond. Absolute magnificence. Not a word wasted. Thank you.
(bookmarked)
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and I forgot
whole bunches of these ....
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damn ....damn....damn..
excellent... just.. excellent.
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Thanks so much xx
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always.. always...always
xxx
you is beautiful..
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Outstanding
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Thankyou
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daaaammmnnnn!
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Thanks Nic.. x
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