In confusion of this masquerade of beauty,
beautiful sunset drifts away into quiet dawn,
plunges me into blindness and unawareness
like a shadow of artistic ambiguity.
I lie awake in the numbness of understanding
only to fantasize of what lies beyond my reaching.
Thus, the road that stretches have many miles.
I share your heart, your laughter and smiles
Yet, in your presence, I'm in disguise.
Your personality is a total charmer
when you smile, the moon reflects joy.
But sometimes I feel like a loveless abyss
with all of my love, I can't even share with you a kiss.
Excited, yet a bit bemused.
When you're sad, I get so blue;
knowing that my invisible hugs cannot reach you.
Many nights and days; I long for your embrace.
but circumstances have not given us the time and place.
Sometimes I dream of a place where love abounds;
perhaps by a riverside under the mystic moonlight
Not a single word, just you and I without any sounds
only to find love's definition in each other's eyes.
Day and night merge in the same embrace;
a tear or a smile both depending on our will.
Every soul holds the heartbeat of a lifetime's dance;
strange are these common bonds we feel.
I'm curiously apathetic and reasonably unhindered.
Although my path bends, folds, and zigzags
in a forest with monsters and untamed trails,
I'm a determined wilderness lover.
Yet, perhaps and maybe too,
love's all I'm searching for ...
I'm sprinkling love on rigid wits
with a fragrance sweet and undeniable ...
It's a decision I may live to regret ...
but, what's regret, - If never tried ...
I've been repeatedly ripped by life,
adrift in a waterless, unending sea,
and drifting there and everywhere,
I admit to myself consciously,
my path is invisible and thirsty,
fleeting and unknown, but what's life,
without a challenge?
Dreaming that you acknowledge my admirations…
You capture the sprout of my affection
In the dawn, awaking to my senses,
I attempt to uncover the core of what I dreamt.
In a moment as rare as this, I am love -
sparkling in the light of your spiritual moonbeams.
Author notes
Mackie
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A contest entry
- Inviting My 15 Closest Friends Here Round 1 by Aurielle.
1000 points, ended November 28, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options Contest For All! by lesbian-in-love.
580 points, ended December 1, 2007, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
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400 points, ended November 30, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
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3500 points, ended December 14, 2007, 25 entries
Gold trophy winner
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375 points, ended December 1, 2007, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
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550 points, ended December 7, 2007, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
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1200 points, ended February 13, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
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700 points, ended January 18, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
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600 points, ended February 1, 2008, 21 entries
Honorable mention
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375 points, ended March 4, 2008, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Secretly Love You. by Poetryintheblood.
525 points, ended February 27, 2008, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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350 points, ended March 17, 2008, 143 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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500 points, ended May 9, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - True Love by Samantha Marie.
450 points, ended October 5, 2008, 64 entries
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525 points, ended October 10, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lover's Dance by emc2.
750 points, ended November 4, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Stunning poem!
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I am in awe of this poem. I cannot even begin to describe how this beautifully romantic piece made me feel inside. I had to read it a second time just to take it all in fully. It is truly a masterpiece. I am humbled. Thank you so for sharing such a glorious write with us. ~Gypsy~
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Wow, this is absolutely wonderful. I was attached the whole time, and it got better as it went.
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absolutely amazing. extremely beautiful and well written. the emotion is deep and intense. this deserves all the praise and recognition. I loved it ^_^
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Love it !!!!!!!
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GREEAATT!
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This is wonderful, and epic-ly so. Very much well done.
Congratulations on your deserved wins.
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OMG
How beautiful!
Such an awesome write of love that so RICHLY deserves all the recognition this has received!
I stand in awe of your talent,poet
Bravo and kudos to you!
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"Not a single word, just you and I without any sounds
only to find love's definition in each other's eyes." This is my favorite part, it reminds me of my own love!
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Beautiful imagery and an amazing feel to this piece, really enjoyed reading this. stunningly penned, great work and keep it up!
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VERY,,PRETTY !!
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good job and good luck
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This is such a beautiful poem. I really love the descriptions and the emotions you presented in this piece. This is truly wonderful. Thank you for entering the contest and best of luck!
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this is beautiful. i love the way you expressed how you felt about this person. i can really relate. Good Luck and thanks for entering.
Sarah
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very good and emotional write! good luck in the contest! thanks for entry!
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beautiful entry.
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Thank you for your beautifully worded entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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a beautiful write
thanks for entering
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This is an excellent write, as the decorations show. You have penned it beutifully. Thanks for entering and good luck
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In confusion of this masquerade of beauty,
beautiful sunset drifts away into quiet dawn,
plunges me into blindness and unawareness
like a shadow of artistic ambiguity.
Beautiful descriptions! Great job and good luck!
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Wow i can see why this poem won so many trophies; it's amazing. Very well deserved! This was such a beautifully written poem, I cant find anything wrong with it. It's perfect in my book. Loved it.. cant find the words to say accept: MASTERPIECE.
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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mhm, Very good imagry. Thanks for entering it in my contest.
good luck
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Nice imagery and very sweet. Thanks for entering and good luck
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when you get carried away in your world of love any place can be romantic and the right place always will be where you both are, nice post
thank you for sharing good luck
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HOLY CRAP. That poem be tasty. Seriously, you rock. However in the middle, you kinda lost it and the poem sorta became boring. Way to go, though.
According to Tua, the part I relate to is:
"But sometimes I feel like a loveless abyss
with all of my love, I can't even share with you a kiss."
Lol. Yay you. Thanks for making our contest sexy.
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This was really good! Thanks for your entry
Kari
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Holy cow that was long. I can't believe it was so good I read the whole thing. I can see why you got all those trophies. The word choice, imagery and flow were amazing!
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wow this poem is so deep full of a river of emotions flowing all the way though you show your pains of letting someone go you once loved and still love deeply if you are meant to be together it will happen the universe has its own patterns of connections to make us whole with our soul mates the past does not eqaul the future it makes us who we are the following stanzas were just so touching to read
In confusion of this masquerade of beauty,
beautiful sunset drifts away into quiet dawn,I lie awake in the numbness of understanding
only to fantasize of what lies beyond my reaching.
Thus, the road that stretches have many miles.In a moment as rare as this, I am love -
sparkling in the light of your spiritual moonbeams.
I share your heart, your laughter and smileswhen you smile, the moon reflects joy.
But sometimes I feel like a loveless abyssEvery soul holds the heartbeat of a lifetime's dance;
strange are these common bonds we feel.I've been repeatedly ripped by life,
adrift in a waterless, unending sea,
and drifting there and everywhere,
congratulatoins on all your well deserved shinys good luck in the contest
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Aww how sad!...maybe you could put invisible love as a title instead? Sorry lol I just like coming up with titles. Thanks for entering the contest and good luck
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wow...this is powerful, beautiful write and very well penned! loving the flow and feeling the emotion
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A lot better and more powerful than the other version. This poem gives me goosebumps when I read it. You need to publish this poem. Take your own advice do what is necessary hun. Submit your poetry to the top publishing companies. This one looks all pollished and everything.
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*aplause* I usualy don't read long poems but I couldn't keep my eyes off this
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the love and longing is reflected very powerflly in those lines...
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A long piece, but it's sweet. I know how it feels to be in a long distance relationship. However mine worked out and we're together now. Nice word usage. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Nice job. Very beautiful.
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Truely beautiful! I love the challenge that you set here. The words came out of this page and sucked me into it! Fabulous job! I hope you go far in my contest!
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I adore how you share of a challenge within your poem. This piece of work is very touching and reaches beyond the surface. I really enjoyed reading this poem. thank you for sharing it with all of us and being here.
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A very beautiful poem about love and it perfectly fits my contest. The words painted suce a toughing and originaly imagine in my mind that i cant help but love it. You've done a great job. Tanks for entering my contest and good luck.
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This piece speaks very strongly of the feelings involved and I can greatly relate as in the past, long ago I felt like this for someone and I never took a chance, never let her know how I felt and ultimately watched her end up with someone else. However, new opportunities arose and life surprisingly offered up something else that I did not let go that time.
This piece reminds me very much of that and all the feelings involved.
Good write.
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Wow I imagine this is what was ecchoing in the mind of Cereno DeBershiak over the unrequieted love he had for Roxanne. Excelent poem you have here "Cereno" is one of my favorite movies of all time and one of my favorite characters!
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I can see why you won so many trophies for this very lovely piece of art.
It is truly nicely done.
A bit long, but worth the time.
I was reading this as apart of the contest were everyone who entered has the chance to pick the winner.
Anyway I wish you lots of luck.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Very sensitive and descriptively written.
Thank you for entering.
Paul -
Well done, poet. This speaks of everlasting emotions/timeless and real. (I like real). An elevated write. Keep penning. One.
Dez -
Very plaintive write that has a voice of sadness deep down that permeates throighout the poem and leaves a feeling of unfullfillment because of the wants and wishes that are but fantasies and not yet happened. The eternal optimist and one hopes that they turn into reality for you.
Bazza
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nice poem. I am amazed at it's content and how greatly your words were used here. Good luck in this contest. You have written a very fine piece.
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Too many adjectives for my taste and the lack of a consistent beat or scheme made me lose interest quickly. Very very long. I am positive that this could be edited down and fixed up to really be captivating.
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very good imagery i was able to imagine this whole poem it was great good job
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Wow!! I have truly never read anything that I could relate to more then this... you've truly done a great job here *and the collection of trophies says it all*
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wow. nicely written. i enjoy how much you've captured your love for someone in a more traditional way of wording. thanks so much for entering!
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this is a really good poem. Because of the type of lettering that you used it is hard to read and its a bit lengthy too. It is still good altogether though. Good luck in the contes
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Lovely
That was a lovely write!! As I read it I felt as if it was in the perspective of a long-distance love... one seeming as if it could never be returned? Thanks for the write.
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holy cow what a load of trophies this has won!
this is romantic and sincere. how sad to love someone and it's not returned yet hope is still alive.
thank you for entering and good luck
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This is exactly the kind of entry I've been looking for in my contest, one that exemplifies the best AP has to offer. Great write.
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Im speechless.
This is awesome.
You have real potential, if not a bit long winded.
But it's best to make it a decently medium length, to keep the attention of the readers whom dont have evry good attention spans.
(acd3 is one of them, i go to school with him and he's an idiot.)
Brilliant.
Keep Writing,
BlackThorn138.
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A little long. But good still. beautifully written. thanks for entering.
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Congratulations on your silver trophy.
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Interesting piece. The background is really pretty and so are your words. Your rhyming was done well in this. A little long, but it held my attention.
Thanks for entering and good luck.
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this is so amaziing and the title is beautiful and so poetic.
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Wow! This is a popular one. Thanks for entering.
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This has some great lines to it, but actually has quite a few cliche' ones as well. I don't feel it takes away from the piece much, the imagery is very well done. It reminds me of lying on a rooftop at sunset and mulling over life as though it were the last time we could do it. I like it. Nice job.
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It is a long poem, but it was well thought out and put together in a superb manner... my favorite lines were
"I'm sprinkling love on rigid wits
with a fragrance sweet and undeniable ... "
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Great Write! Thanks for entering and good luck!
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ahhh, how I've been there myself. I know how this feels - the unrequinted feelings, confusion and of loving someone so dearly and honestly that you just couldn't hurt them, because it would rip you apart as well.
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This is great! Such a beautiful piece you
have written here. Congratulations to you
on your five gold trophies and I hope that
you have even more continued success with
this piece. Thanks a lot for entering it
into my contest and I wish you the best of
luck with it! Keep up the wonderful work here!
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This is a poem to make a heart beat, it is incredible, a fresh breath of air, a little girl standing in a rainstorm looking to the sky, praying hard, and asking not what to do, but where to go, how so many can love, how so many can lose themselves, looking. Rushing down into my soul like a hundred thousand tornadoes, calming seas within my throat, begging only to be heard, heart to heart, love so gifted and true, a truth purer than pure evil, this is a fable so weak, so strong, so true, a story length, a heart torn open, a dictionary sewn shut, but here in the middle of the night, in the depth of the dark, a light shone bright and through. A hope distressed by a trembling fear, love loss of pain, an inspiration daggered down to shreds, yet a breath as beautiful as could be. I envy you for your words, for your truest emotions, how life will throw us curve balls, yet how we strive to reunite our hearts to our souls with our minds.
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BREATH TAKING
Beautiful words flowing from a golden pen...sighs...Outstanding! nothing more can be said... but thank you kindly for sharing and entering
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So sad this is...
Loving in no return is never a good thing.
It leaves us feeling alone, and worthless even.
Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you!
Blessings
Bel
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I know how this feels. 100%. it's a little hard to relate to though because of the way you presented it. I honestly was a little turned off by all the contests you entered it in but that's ok (: I really really like the last two lines! Thanks for the entry.
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such an emotional tiring thing to love someone who don't love you back. thanks for entering this poem. I really enjoyed (and connected) to this.
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This was one of the best poems I have read yet! Truly touched me and I could relate to the majority of it ... So close to home ... Truly deserving of a Gold!
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Excellent Write Congratulations on all the trophies.
Thank you for taking the time
to enter into my contest,
I wish you the best of luck.
RedwingSpirit
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This sent chills through me as I read it. It says, far more eloquently than I managed to, mostly what I tried to convey in "Unrequited Love". If you get the chance to read it, I think you'll like it, although it's a bit plain compared to this one.
My favorite parts are:
"It's a decision I may live to regret ...
but, what's regret, - If never tried ..."
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"Like hot sands dying of thirst
Quench my heart with a drop of your life".
This poem may well become one of my favorites.
Thank you so much for sharing & good luck in my contest (& all those others)!
~SunfloweRose
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Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck!
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Wow. I wish I could write like you. It's so long. (Not that that's a bad thing.) But I couldn't write something that long if I tried. I think it was absolutely wonderful. Great literary devices! Thanks for entering!
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Really long poem but it's a good poem!I love the choice of words and the flow of the whole piece and it ryhmed in certain places!Good luck in the contest!
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Well this was quite a long poem to read actually, but you did quite good with it I noticed the rhyme here and there, so I'm wondering if this was coincidental or not?
anyway, thank you for entering the contest - I wish you the best of luck!
Leander -
Sweet! Please do not respond till the contest closes...applause to come!
Az -
Wow this poem is beautiful! I love it. On a scale from one to ten I'd give it a 9. Thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck!!!
Megan -
very nice, loved the coice of words it gave it tonz of emotion
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Lovely, as said below lots of emotion. Good luck in my contest and thank you for entering.
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Very nice...lots of emotion in this. I enjoyed the flow of the poem and everything, just great. =]
Congrats on all your other trophy winnings for this.
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the second stanza, fourth stanza, ninth stanza, and the twelth stanza i really enjoyed. none of it really sound awkward, it all goes together really nicely.
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where this is very long and I had to read it several times. I loved it. It was a beautiful poem and tells a great story. Well done. Great use of words and description. best of luck.
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heart and love do not belong in poetry
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Then what does belong in poetry?
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"Your personality is a total charmer
when you smile, the moon reflects joy."
Oh I love those lines!
This piece is just too amazing! It's so sweet and full of love, and I think any girl who reads this would fall right into your arms!
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this was very good! i really liked it! your poem flowed very well thank you for entering and good luck with my contest!
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This was a lovely piece of writing. It captures perfectly what I'm looking for Well done and thankyou for entering x
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Amazing Poem
This was a long poem but one I enjoyed reading. It brings to light the pain many of us face when falling in love long distance. . I can feel your words because I hear them and see them written everyday. Love isn't very easy sometimes. Thank you for sharing this. A very heart felt poem that touched upon my own heart. Take care. Sandy
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This is a beautiful poem, i like the beggining line, masquerade of beauty. I love how you give craft such amazing imagery.
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brilliant poem, well written, well done.thanks for entering and good luck!
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This....is a long poem. somethign I haven't read in ages. Thank you. I don't midn reaidng long poems, I prefer them, actually.
I'm glad you chose this theme, it seems to be a popular one, and I give you credit for making me pick up a dictionary to lok up words I didn't know. Something no one else yet has to do in the contest.
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This..Is an amazing poem. I know exactly how you feel too..To love someone so much, but never be able to hold them...So this hit me on a very personal level. Thank you SO much for entering this in my contest.
I love the word choice, and the flow! All I can say is..WOW!
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Wow, this was deep. I like how it alternates between apathetic and wanting to plunge in head first--that whole living life with unhindered passion thing. On the journey toward love, I think we go through both. From personal experience, I always jumped in head first, until one relationship broke my heart. It was a long two years and half-fulfilling attempts that followed, much wondering 'when the hell will it end?' and 'surely there must be something better--' until one day I met a young man that took me completely by surprise. That night I got in the car and said, "I think I have met someone exceptional."
This piece was really great, and I love how it can be taken multiple ways-- you could be someone searching for their significant other, or perhaps you have someone in mind that is just not attainable at this time. This is a very powerful poem, and your imagery is astounding. Excellent write, good luck in my contest!
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This peie is very beautifull, oit touches the very reaches of the soul and leaves the reader finding their innerselfs weeping! I loved evry moment of this peice! The flow and structure of this pulled this all together quiet well! YOu have such a way with words and you have a talent for making the reader feel exactly what you must be feeling at he time of the write! Excelent job and thanks so much for the entery! Good luck!
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Not a single word, just you and I without any sounds
only to find love's definition in each other's eyes.
That part was my favorite because it was so easy to relate to for me anyways. The rhyme is on and off. Some parts do and some don't, but i'll keep it all the same. It's full of imagery, and most importantly, love!
Thanks for the entry!
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I'm real close to falling in love with this one...beautiful write. Made me struggle with my feelings from beginning to end.
Thank you for your entry.
Brazos -
What a nice piece of work, and very sensual, worded just beautiful...But the distance enhances you imagery to love.....I could see this pic as part of your dream........thanks for entering our contest......novy
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Illustrious
Flawlessly illustrated, and masterfully put together.
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