Walk the dark path
through the cold night endless
looking for who
who you really are
fall forever
from the tower of non human soul
to find the missing life line
the one you broke so long ago
walk the dark path through the cold night
looking for who
who you really are
Touch me with your love
reveal to me my true name
"are you scared?"
"of what lies beyond what you know"
walk the dark path through the cold night
looking for who
who you really are
Author notes
option XXI nemo nightwish
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This is a really great poem. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for entering. Love and Peace!
-Jess
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thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox
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this was a very good poem you have entered! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox
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It's short, but it gets the point across without all the repetition and long verses we song writers like to use so much. It's very rare to see a song that ges a point across without all of that, so I applaud you. However, it leaves us wanting more. What you have here is great, but next time you could elaborate more and leave us with more satisfaction. Hwne people listen to songs, they're greedy. They don't want it to end. If this ever gets produced, people would want to hear more. Keep that in mind for next time. In general, however, this is a great write. I hope your others are like it
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very good thanks for entering
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I liked that you used many of the lyrics from the song in your poem. You painted a dark picture with the words "walk the dark path through the cold night, looking for who, who you really are". As desolate as it seems, so lonely and empty, it's like that dark path helped guide a way to the light.
Great take on the prompt and good luck in the contest!
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