sometimes
speech-bubbles hover
round her head:
they whisper 'fraud'
in the company
of women
who have each known
cycles
of moon and child.
She can never share
some mysteries: bladder-control;
'Depends' and such.
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A contest entry
- psst..i have a secret by Suzanne Dia.
450 points, ended November 19, 2007, 12 entries
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we are but ourselves and have to overcome obsticles that lay in front of only us. but we are not alone as we all think. to reach out and tell others who you are, is just the first step in so many. to let others konw that they are not alone, soon theyll reach out to you as well. i love how the first stanza was put.... very unique. thanks for sharing, may you have the strength to go on. and best of luck in the contest.
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You are lucky.
And still the most beautiful girl I know.
Skin and organs will never taint who you are.
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...i know some women who
like to stand up and pee
we are who we are, darling,
and that is all i have to
say...love, Lane
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brilliant really. i really appreciated the thought-bubble statement, such a nice creative bend. and one little question. maybe it's a femenine thing but i didn't really understand the cycles of the moon. Could you possible elaborate, I'd appreciate it. The first thing that came to my head really was the Jewish Calender which is dependent on the moon. Just a random thought.
Anywho, great job on this and good luck with the contest. Cheers.
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Can't really say much. Shocking and good.
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hahhahah.. well yeah
all i need is somebody to whistle and i can pee uncontrollably....
but yes, i understand the hidden brevity here.. but hey sis, you.... you have no worries....
if i use the words... crazy bitch... i mean it in a loving and laughing way.... so put in your big girl pants and have done with it...
lovely secret darlin
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oh no it's easy
drink way too much water
then sit..and wait
make sure you have to do the dishes
get the water nice and hot
start scrubbing and wait for the bladder to contract
you'll see
ahem
I can understand where you come from with this, really, but you're no fraud, nope. Just lucky
(I know you don't necessarily agree) but lucky
enough not to have to deal with blood clots on
a regular basis.
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