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My Immortal place

I will cast away my fears
and in my haste will not forget
those who tremble and fall.

With all my heart I will endure
and the flames that rush to scar your soul
will never leave its mark 

I will without regret
protect and calm your child
and bring them home to you

And in my days of solitude
I will think of you and yours
and thank the grace that saved me
in times emortal place

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  • grannyeri gold member
    January 30, 2008

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    See no photo here, but can imagine it if it is one of outer space - immense, breathtaking, awesome in it's own right. The poem reflects that endlessness, that soothing, floating carefree spirit of just going with the flow, of things going right and of the endlessness of eterrnity. Congratulations on placing in this contest. Must have had some great entries to top this one.


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    November 28, 2007

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    I adore the imagery of this write..
    Thank you so much for this beautiful entry...smiles
    Such a heartfelt message that should be shared with the world..
    Excellent photo..
    Peace and many blessings
    ~A~

    • Tercarro
      November 28, 2007
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      Thank you

      Thanks you so much for your words.
      Terry


  • Knight70 silver member
    November 26, 2007
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    Beautiful poem!!

    I will cast away my fears
    and in my haste will not forget
    those who tremble and fall.


    This is my favorite stanza. Those Hubble space photos sure are breathtaking to look at. This is a profound poem, filled to the brim with rich imagery. Don

    • Tercarro
      November 26, 2007
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      many thanks

      I am very grateful and do thank you for your comments which as a writer make them all the more prescious.
      Terry


  • Amy Meneses
    November 16, 2007

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    This was soothing and pleasant to read yet... I think you can expand on this so we can really see and feel this place. Bring it alive!

    • Tercarro
      November 16, 2007
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      Many thanks

      Thank you so much for reading this, for your honesty and helpful comments which I really appreciate. I'm sure I could expand it but I won't because I'm one of those people who once I start expanding it goes on and never gets finished and then I leave it for ever undone. What I have been trying to do all my life is to write something and leave it as it is even if I don't like it. So I do thank you for your help and I hope I haven't offended you by not taking up your suggestion.
      Terry


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    November 16, 2007
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    wow...excellent entry.
    Breath taking imagery..smiles
    Thank you so much...
    Best wishes..
    ~A~

    • Tercarro
      November 16, 2007
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      As you can see

      I took my ispiration from the previous submission which is not what you wanted as I can see from the link you sent me which I have just checked out. I see what you mean when you say, the submission is not what is reflected by that artist.
      Thank you for your comment but I too have not reflected the art and talent of this man.
      Terry

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