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Beloved Rain

The wind blew through my auburn hair
As i awaited the arrival of my dearest love
The heart chilling air seemed to be saying beware
Which came from the being that was above

I looked up to the unforgivable sky
It seemed to proclaim its upcoming crime
Though i'd never truly reply
Because i have run out of time

Clouds came and circled our meeting place
And my heart began to beat and never slowed
For i could not find the space
Where i was standing alone on the road

The air was thick and there was no remaining light
Nothing to save me from the rain
For my skin will ignite
Without my love to keep me from being slain

With the rain comes no hope
And no surivial rate
For my love holds the rope
The rope which no one can desecrate

Darkness continued and it never seemed to end
But far away there was a flicker of life
That came from above and seemed to decend
It cut through my hopelessness like a knife

And soon the darkness disapeared quickly
Only the rain remained
Which was done quite nicely
As i saw your silhouette which could not be explained

You came and put your arms around me
And proceeded to hold me near
I tried to look at you with such a degree
The rain was the only thing i could hear

We were drenched to the bone
But we did not care
For our love outshone
Anything the rain could ensnare

Author notes

Contest-
"Love can never grow old.
Locks may lose their brown and gold.
Cheeks may fade and hollow grow.
But the hearts that love will know,
Never winter's frost and chill,
Summer's warmth is in them still"
-Buscaglia, Leo
Contest- Sweet--Fire--Roses

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Done with help of Eryn.

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  • okadadokie
    April 24, 2008
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    Wonderful write. Great job.

    ~Oka/KC

  • piccola silver member
    April 11, 2008

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    nice imagery...the rhyme was smooth and it flows easily from one verse to the next. Thank you for the entry.


  • Ms Raneika
    March 18, 2008

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    Nicely done write what you and Eryn help produce ...I thank you for entering my contest much love, Raneika


  • TheAshtrayGirl
    January 27, 2008

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    :)

    This is very sweet
    &
    Beautiful
    I also love the rhyme style
    It fits well

    Thankyou for entering my contest
    &
    Goodluck

    Jaz <3


  • GypsyEyes
    December 20, 2007

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    i was a little confused at first but as i read more i got it. great poem and i wish you good luck in my twin's contest.
    ~Dommi


  • ThatONEweirdChick
    December 17, 2007

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    Hmm, at first I was kind of lost with this poem but towards the end it really makes sense and I see what you're talking about here. This is a story of good love... but somewhat happy then. Thanks for entering my contest tho


  • MerelyMadness
    December 2, 2007

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    Props for internal rhyme and alliteration! But slant rhyme, as far as I'm concerned, is a deal breaker. I just personally don't like it, except in songs. Thank you for entering my contest!


  • Animalia-de-Flux
    November 17, 2007
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    wow, this is amazing


  • The Imperfection
    November 17, 2007

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    this is golden. it captured me from beginning to end. perfect word selection. it's beautiful. the image is so clear, down to the smallest detail. it's amazing, a breath-taking read. brilliant work!


  • Ephiphany
    November 16, 2007

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    I loved the tone to this piece...

    very soft and full of loving imagery. Thanks for your entry and good luck

    e

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