It wasn’t the flowers.
They were sweet.
It wasn’t the dinner
or the shows.
I did enjoy them.
They were fun.
It wasn’t the kisses.
There aren’t any I want to forget.
Really!
I don’t want you to leave.
It is how I feel when I am with you;
the way I show up to myself,
when things aren’t working
or I am having one of those days.
It is how I feel your laugh.
I will never forget how it runs through me.
It is about how much
I want to be available for you,
discover how much happier you are
when you are being with me.
I don’t know if it’s poetry
or if it’s love, but I am ready
to see if it grows.
If you are with me . . .
1:34 PM
11/16/07
Alexandria H.D. , VA
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Prompt: 'At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet.' by Plato
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Love could be so simple if we'd only let it. We ll have our insecurities and I think those are the root of most comlications. How can you feel loving and hide pieces of yourself at the same time? I like the mirror you've held up to yourself in this piece...
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It is a challenge to write from a woman's perspective. Love and fear run side by side and contort the human being. We also sometimes get so caught up in trying to be loved that we forget to allow ourselves to be loved. There is more in this poem, but I have a hell of a head cold to day and am moving kind of slow.
Love, Tom B.
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I Love PLain Jane and everything she stands for...all too often we get caught up in realtionships about what we can "do" special for the other person when all we really want is the "time of being together" Exceelent gently yet powerful way of putting the delicacies of the simpleness of the pleasures of new found love.....best of luck!
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Some people think it is all about the show and tell. They forget that it is all about the person and the heart they have, the gifts they bring to the universe.
Glad you enjoyed my simple little piece. Plain Jane is far from over.
Love, Tom B.
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This is simply put. But the heart and soul of all love poetry. It needed to be said one way or another, straight faced and honest. Loved it Tom Keep up the beautiful work.
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This just showed up. It seems to me that the simplist things often are the most difficult to achieve. I think we make them appear complicated so we don't have to admit that something that appears so simple can be so hard.
Love, Tom B.
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Absolutely beautiful. I loved this very much. I expected something completely different, from the title, but it was still awesome.
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There are moments. We are alive when we are aware of them without deliberation or thought, simply in the experience. Then, we know what is right in the singular statement.
Love, Tom B.
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I know what it is.... LOL! Beautiful write, Tom. And I needed the smile. "It's how I feel your laugh." Doesn't that just say it all when it's love? I'm not sure if you're showing up to yourself, or showing yourself up. hehehe.
Love, K.
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What I hope is not self evident is who is writing this. Plain Jane or the poet.
The rest -- simplicity. Love makes itself known by the Light it brings to all things.
Love, Tom B.
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Very Potent!!!!!!
I really like the raw emotions passionately exuding through your words, with temperance slowly coming to a boil, although reluctant, you turn the fire down, so as to not burn or scorch the feelings you are trying to convey. Very nice write. I will read on.....
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Simplicity is its own payment plan.
Thanks for stopping by.
Peace & Light,
Tom B.
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for some reason this hits a note. it resembles friendship and so much more sometimes.
it goes well with the prompt. thanks for sharing. and good luck in the contest.
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thanks for dropping by. Should not all relationships first be based in friendship
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friendship 1st
friendship comes along with trust. and i have both in You.
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And at the touch of love everyone should become this open and honest about how they feel. Love, C
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only if they have been doing it for awhile. Plain Jane has had practice. Keep it simple sweet heart and you won't have your own games to see through
We acutally need schools for us to learn how to recognize, identify and respond to feelings. Most of us only know three or four. Shut down if we get more than that.
Love, Tom B.
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'At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet.' by Plato
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