I remember a silent rain that kept me from him
That dripped cool even in the passivity
My heart was shy in it’s seldom undertone
As love spooned feelings that swayed like
a timepiece gently in the ardor of souls
My heart’s beat fainted upon its shyness
As my kiss held back to his innocents
Lust formed in its serene touch
and there the rain formed again in me
Colors of tedium danced in gray trees
that prance upon the valleys of eyes
“Oh my love I love you but
I’m in-love with someone else”
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The same rain that conversed to me
when my other love was there
his soul he said was like a "dry mist"
held in confusion of a path
so he abandoned my soul
as I knew it was the unsure drip
of my soul that fell upon his
as we made together one…
when the time to listen to
my soulbeat
it said “only be with him
and nobody else”
but I didn't know until the silence
formed a higher volume
in love that was cool
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Author notes
This is a sad poem I wrote when I was with someoneelse but in love with another. The person I was with felt some kind of unsureness that toped our long relationship and so happened the next because I still loved the last man...
A contest entry
- The Lies.Wont.Hide.Your.Flaws♥ by Dead Star--x.
475 points, ended November 20, 2007, 7 entries
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I enjoyed your poem keeping writing poetr
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This poem deserves a gold metal, but that's just mt opinion. It wasn't too descriptive and it was vague but I still enjoyed reading it! :} Great job.
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That's deep and you really get your point across. I loved reading this poem and am sorry that you had to go through this kind of emotion.
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Colors of tedium danced in gray trees
that prance upon the valleys of eyes
my favorite line
i really like this one a lot-for such few entries you guys are making this really hard to judge x]
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... and so happened "the next"? so WHAT happened? care to share? If not, fine... still wanted to say I much liked your comparison used throughout. A very abstract but effective piece with a clear story that's sad but beautiful like rain sometimes is loved the ending!
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