At dawn,
nature grows a touch too tender;
Her petals pendulate
(like paper aeroplanes),
from murmuring midnight
to moistening moans
(of morning).
She plays with dewdrops,
then resurrects
smoothness to mud
and unfurling foliage.
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beautiful beyond words i absolutely loved it. Thank u for the comment and I look forward to reading more of ur work.
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I totally dig this and I find this one amazing
Thank you so much for your entry here I love it!! 
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The diction in this rolls off the tongue so nicely. Thanks for entering.
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My dearest Leander, this poem holds the readers attention... gently steering with its steady pace and flow. I enjoyed this a lot. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet.
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Nice piece. This is interesting, I have noticed most people's favorite or best writes are about love, but this is slightly different. I read this and see that it is still love, but it is of nature rather than a person (at least in context).
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Superbly done, best of luck with it in the contest
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Loved the verbiage and the smooth flowing alliterations.A very well penned write....Thanks for entering and best of luck
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Congrats on the silver. This is a masterpiece once again you are a very talented writer.
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i'm pretty sure i know who this is
thanks for entering and you've made the finalists with this gem
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How could you know I'm Monica Cruz
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This is lovely as it speaks of nature's fragility in early morning, the risk each unfurling blossom takes each day to smile it's radiance upon us. Simple and poignant. Congratulations on the silver it what was (I'm sure) a competetive contest. I hope to see this poem in Allpoetry Book 2. I have a poem under consideration myself. It's called e x i t p l a n - my darkest piece.
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Beautifully written, nature can be tame or wild. Love the last lines. well done.
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smooth alliteration. so smooth that i didn't catch it until second read
you've captured that quiet hour of sunrise with a few mere words
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Nice
Can Natures touch ever be too tender?
"She plays with dewdrops,"
Was a great line...Thanks for entering, and good luck
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Ahhh . . . Makes one appreciate the beauty morning brings with each successive haunt. Very stirring, poignant and original. Love the descriptive quality within this write. Shows me that you know a measure of peace within you. Nice work. Good luck on the publication op. Be blessed!--Kel :
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This is really sweet. I especially love the ending - anticlimactic seems to be the fad now, but yours was...I don't know how to describe it. Strong, not really slowing down, but quiet. Great job.
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This is spectacular.
I don't really know what else to say.
I love the simplicity of it.
Thanks for the entry!
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A very good write, I quite enjoyed reading it, short and sweet but very powerful in such a short space... very well written, thank you for entering it. xXx
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Admiring and sighing and thinking, "Oh, I wish I'd said that!" Your author page is so much fun, Sir Poet!
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Lee I don't know how you do it but DAYUM!
i am so envious of your pen. No matter the topic or the prompt you always seem to come out on top with a piece that is like smooth silk. Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you!
Blessings
Bel
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Haha, that's it - I've read enough I'm adding you as my favourite!
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"from murmuring midnight
to moistening moans
(of morning)"
Excellent. The last stanza is be-you-tea-full. Absolutely. The alliteration here is wonderful!! Great job here! Congrats on making it to the book -
~Namita
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How did I miss this one????
. This is a beautiful poem, leander. Nature poetry is something you do so very well and I just love the depth and the beauty you've weaved into this one!!
Congrats on being included in the 2nd AP Book Project - wonderful!!!
~ Nicolette
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The alliteration here is smooth and beautiful.
I love the ethereal simplicity of this poem-- it brings to mind a sense of sweet solitude in the early hours, watching the sunrise, perhaps.
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Oh My Word!!
Ok Alliteration King
Love this piece You have penned and it just rolls
off the lips
How do You dewwwwwwwwwwwwwww it
Love the words: Her petals pendulate...
Yepppppppppp~~
Kodak moment
Thank You for sharing Your Talent my Friend!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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'dewdrops' One of my favourite words
This is a beautiful phrased piece, captivating and with each new line another mesmerizing word choice.
Thanks for entering
& you are being removed for this poem didn't make it to Pre-lims.
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This is very soft and sensual look at the morning (possibly even veiled smuttyness, but that's probably just my mind at work).
Good write.
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relief
nice job . . good description and connection with nature . . like "Her petals pendulate" and "She plays with dewdrops" . . congrats on the trophy, too . . !
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I like the personification here and the fine alliteration which gives out a smooth sigh like the fresh sounds in the morning. This is lovely Sweet. Best wishes in the contest.
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Beautifully expressed, love the personification used here. Also adore the alliteration in the first part, all those beautifully m's. Beautifully expressed, gentle words of wisdom.
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spank her till she gets her work done
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'How cunningly nature hides every wrinkle of her inconceivable antiquity under roses and violets and morning dew!' by Ralph Waldo Emerson
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okey, I asked you nothing boring
but that didn't mean you had to give me something uberly difficult either
but I can work with it... I hope
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Oh come om Lee if anyone can work this one it's YOU!
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Depens on my muse
but I'll try sweetypoo
(that didn't sound right, huh
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HAHA
well, things don't always have to sound right...
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-kicks ya muse-
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I think your foot is stuck in my muse
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Get it out then
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it may take surgery to do that
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oh my,how deep can a foot go?
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TRY BUTTER FIRST I don't want the doctor's to amputate her bum
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Butter never works when I have hiking boots on
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faints
my muse's bum
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