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Nativity

Now laying on her bed of straw
And safe from Herod’s awful threat
The angels bow in rev’rent awe
In wait of He that pays the debt
Virgin conception without flaw
Innocence no one will forget
Timeless gift of love and healing
Yoked with God; this Christmas feeling

 

 

 

Author notes

An Ottava Rima is a poem written in 8-line octaves. Each line is of a 10 or 11 syllable count in the following rhyme scheme:
one octave poem. abababcc
two octave poem. abababcc, dededeff
three octave poem. abababcc, dededeff, ghghghii

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  • DesolatELifE
    June 19

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    Well, I like it, and it's very nice to read, but the lines are all eight syllables, and your explanation says it needs ten or eleven Lovely, either way.

  • Virginia Logsdon
    December 21, 2007
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    Nice job of writing about the true meaning of Christmas!


  • korculablue
    November 26, 2007

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    This is lovely

    This is so brilliantly executed! You have inspired me to have a try at this. The message is simple and beautiful, a message so often forgotten these days of the commercial Christmas.

    Best wishes for success in the competition

    korculablue


  • everyone1 gold member
    November 22, 2007

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    Beautifully crafted!

    I could learn so much from you! I cannot write within boundries like you can, and have it make any real sense! You are brilliant and very gifted! Best wishes in the contest, and happy Thanksgiving again! Be Blessed!

    ~ James ~


  • Animarising
    November 20, 2007

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    This is a very pure piece of work. I love the form and I think you've made it work really well. Congrats!
    This is one my kids would enjoy, I'll share it with them... thanks.


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    November 19, 2007
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  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    November 19, 2007

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    Thank you for entering this lovely Nativity poem.
    I love the stars you used as a border and the lovely write is something I would love to share at the Christmas table this year. Thank you for the Author Notes, it is surely something that shows how much knowledge you have of poetry. I always enjoy your work! Hope to read lots more in the future!


    All the best in this contest, and I hope to read much more of your writes!

    Remember, you can enter this contest as many times as you wish!

    Becks


  • second-born
    November 18, 2007

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    Oh you definitely captured the true reason of Christmas...remembering nativity and the "timeless gift of love and healing" it brought to mankind...a very lovely poem indeed!!!


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    November 17, 2007

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    Awesome!

    When i think i have seen everything, you manage to again me with your poetic talent.

    Your are AP's "Queen of Form"

    However you manage to not only write and Acrostic, which I love, but you also used a form that I have not heard of [Ottava Rima].
    I must add this form to my form poetry notes You know I love form poetry as well, so I'm still in aw over this piece.

    Briliant piece my sweet soul,
    Many blessings,
    Much love,



    David


  • daviscth silver member
    November 17, 2007

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    I loved this and the background you picked fits it so well.
    Many thanks for posting in my contest and all the best at judging. Cathy


  • Swan song gold member
    November 17, 2007

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    This was really good. It is that time of year and this is a very lovely poem Honering the baby Jesus


  • Desire gold member
    November 16, 2007

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    Oh My!

    Love this Acrostic Sweet Soul and
    the form You have brought to Light

    Incorporated the Ottava Rima with the Acrostic...
    Magnificent! Form Queen
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Beautiful
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • And Hyetal
    November 16, 2007

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    Beautiful. It's a great description of Christmas, and surely a placement in the contests! Another great read from you!!!

    Always,
    Cassie


  • Shamanicmusings
    November 16, 2007
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    Very Pretty

    I can see the sheep munching the straw as I read it.


  • StarEyes
    November 16, 2007

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    Nope, not ready to try this style yet! hehe. But you do make them look soooooooo easy! And this does show the TRUE spirit of Christmas! What a great job you did on this one! I love it!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Ithica silver member
    November 16, 2007

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    I was on here earlier as I clicked next poem and had forgotten to click Submit Comment, and when I tried to stop the page from loading my computer hung up/crashed and I got caught betweem two pages. Anyway... This is a wonderfully sentimental poem for the Christmas season! The TRUE meaning of the holiday! I do like the Acrostic Style added to the Ottava Rima. Everthing all blends seamlessly into one beautiful X-Mas gift...


  • sunny day
    November 16, 2007

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    The Nativity is a Heavenly sight to behold. As much as I am a catholic, I have always had one thing I questioned and that is accepting "The Immaculate Conception". I remember questioning this in Sunday school and the nuns could not come up with an answer for me. Instead they scowled, yelled a little and told me I was to believe it if I am to be a good catholic. To this day I still wonder why they couldn't answer it. You have painted a beautiful picture in this "Nativity" and to use the ottava rima with the acrostic is absolutely magnificent. Thank you for sharing the gift of your golden pen once again. It is a masterpiece. Best wishes in the contest. Love you my friend, Joyce


  • Sgt B
    November 16, 2007
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    Just loved it.

    Thank you so much for the reminder of what this day is really about.!


  • artis
    November 16, 2007
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    a perfect conception of just that, all hand painted in lovelty scrolls, capturing the moment of man's salvation, eons ago....superb work....

    I stand humbled beneath your stable creation.~~~Artis


  • Marctheman
    November 16, 2007

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    very very beautiful piece of writing, great flow, great use of words, seems like you know all the different form of poetry that exist, i complement you on that, great good and good luck in the contest.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    November 16, 2007

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    Now this is just breath taking...It flowed so softly and left a peace behind...Words we should never for get Little Blue Star you are truly a wonderful poetess nemehotatse my little one


  • PerVirtuous
    November 16, 2007

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    This is a work of a truly gifted artist. This is not just the craft of a brilliant mind, this has more. I can't explain it, only describe it. You have shared your gift again, gifting us in the process. Thank you.

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