Shards all around, I watched the glass fall,
cracked and broken, tears come as I recall.
Once it was in one piece, like our household,
funny, doesn't take much for things to unfold.
Holding it together, I'm losing the crusade,
not really one of faith but still I have prayed.
Coming apart at the seams, stress takes its toll,
wondering if ever again I will be back in control.
Out of my hands its up to strangers to decide,
whatever the outcome, I will remain by his side.
Author notes
prompt; ***4. Your world falling into chaos and you can't stop it.
A contest entry
- Shards of Memories by PersuingHappyness.
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Beautiful
This was so amazing I loved every word. The end was the best part I think, like others have said before me the loyalty in those words go beyond words, but emotions. Good luck in the contest~!
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I can relate to this piece. I know about the spiraling out of control, but the end... such loyalty. Your world's falling down around your ears and yet you stay stead fast. Amazing.. good luck thanx for entering
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Sorry for the delay in judging; and thank you for taking the time to enter. I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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I had this really great comment that was like... awesome... then I hit the wrong button on my laptop and it went back to the last page and I lost it..... sigh.... lol
Well as I was saying before... I really loved this peice and I thought that the title was awesome.. it caught my attention.... (lol thats a good thing)
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Everything will work out just keep the faith.
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We all need that emotional outlet
and our pain becomes art..
ironic..
Good luck!
Love it lots!!
~Pastel
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I really enjoyed this, Well done
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Good write here
I had a sister that felt the same as this speaks of and she tells me I feel like I will explode any minute .I told then explode let it out scream rant hit a pillow with this furious trage then go out side and scream your guts out and then when you cant anymore come back in and we shall have some coffee and spend the day together doing exactly what she wanted to do . Yes sometimes we just hold things in far to long worried about what others might think .I say who gives a flip what others think its your life so lead that sucker in the diorection you are happy with .
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