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Ladies and Gentlemen

Ladies and Gentlemen Good Evening!
Tonight you are about to behold a spectacular sight as we watch the raging war battle within this young poet's mind.
Ladies and Gentlemen Boys and Girls Let's Get Ready To Rummmmmble!!!

In the left corner we have the dark dreary and down right most hated person in this poets mind the unstoppable the show stopper who is ready to mess with him even more Allie!

* Hears Chants of you're going down and Boo's echo through out the arena *

And in the right corner we have the most determined vigilant young man who is ready to face his fear head on and conquer them the poet known as SmokinHotWhiteTiger

* hears the crowd going nuts as the defending champ gets up and makes his presence known *

* moves to the center of the ring and gets the rules from the referee *

* DING! Goes the bell!

Shuffling their feet side to side and tossing fake punches to nothing but air Allie moves in close and goes for the weak spot Smokin has and connects with a solid hit to the jaw as Smokin's head goes flying backward ... Recovering Smokin jabs back right at Allie with a beautiful combo of left and rights as he connects several times in a row ... with her head spinning Allie gets closer to Smokin and starts to go for the low blows as she connects in several areas and nailing his ribs and knocks him down ... You're a loser Smokin and you know it ...

 

* takes a wad of spit to the cheek *

 

* you can't even last more than one round with me can you big boy *

 

* Allie grins evilly *

 

* Smokin stays down for a second as he shakes the cob webs from his face and gets back to his feet ready to go again * 

 

 Through gritted teeth and unintelligent words that only Smokin knows he goes in for the kill, and starts in jabbing with his left and then a strong right hook and just starts to wail on her and then hears the bell goes DING but continues to pound away till he is roughly handled and taken off her!

 

Round 2:

 

 The fighters get out of their corners and Allie has a fiery passion behind her eyes as she wants to hurt him with all her might after what Smokin pulled and Smokin has a determined grin on his face to deliever that final blow to his worse fear...

 

Smokin comes charging out of his corner and goes for the take down and connects beautifully as he drives Allie to the mat and just starts yellin and screaming at her saying this is for the abuse I endured when I was asleep ... This is for the drugs you supplied me ... This is for the vicious haunting memories I have of you ... This is for the years of therapy I had to endure ... And this is for messing with me when you had no right and Smokin just continyes to pound away at his worst fear and most hated person he ever known and smiles as he watches his bloody bruised and battered face stays down on the mat and hers the bell go DING! DING! DING!

 

* Smokin gets up and raises his boxing gloves into the air and says this is for all of my loyal friends and supports who were with me through out the dark times and she's the one who screwed me up  in alot of ways! *

 

Remember this moment Allie because this is me forver walking away from you as I have conquered you and the fear you brought into my life! Good bye and good ridence forever!

 

Author notes

http://www.saliva.com

Click on that link then click on audio/video then scroll down to Saliva and click on watch the video or listen to the song Ladies and Gentlemen and you will understand the concept of this poem

I hope this poem makes sense as I am really struggling to find myself again and well this is just based upon how I see myself battling the battle within me.

A contest entry

This is based from my favorite song but the way I wrote it was about my perosnal fear I still have but showing me conquering the fear I have when I think about all the crap I bene through!

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  • deleteduser
    November 19, 2007

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    Great job!

    Beauty awes through this poem. You truly found the art in your soul. I'm glad you have decided to stand up for what you believe and what you want the most, to conquer your own fears. You put a lot of effort into this. Good luck!


  • Angel Full Of Hurt
    November 18, 2007

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    Amazing

    VERY VERY SUPERBLY creative..wow never seen such a poem written soooooo CREATIVELY..this is wonderful, great and like a bomb..it is also exciting..wow..thanks for ALWAYS/LOYALLY reading my poems..anyway...this poem is A BANG! it is REALLY good..i hope you'll WIN!


  • Beating gold member
    November 17, 2007

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    this is very close be being all prose, which wasn't allowed in this contest, but I'll accept this.
    It's funny, because at one point I though you were fighting yourself - a bad part of yourself, which I guess we all have - but then it changed to being that other person. I like that. A double meaning, even if you didn't attend it to be like that. Love it!


  • EverxEnding silver member
    November 16, 2007
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    This is so powerfully written.
    I'm proud of you. so proud.