Bereft of facts thinking is a burden
Torn apart the inner
Like a ship wrecked searching the shores
Tossing in turbulent seas.
Never stands like a flower
Unmindful of the attention
Outsmart others in conceivable ways
Trying to stand up on top of a vase.
Mind becomes closed fist
Repels everything
Except what it holds dear
Brewing fiction all the time.
Beliefs drive our thinking
Create disharmony of sorts
Holding the borders sacred
Withdrew into a shell of its making.
This thinking makes the lake murkier
Do not let the light to pass through
Sucks the life giving oxygen
Put of the flame inside.
Author notes
Thinking is a burden bereft of facts
A contest entry
- Think Abstract by Jfd.
600 points, ended November 29, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This was very deserving of a trophy... I enjoyed the read... I liked the abstract thinking, the different ways of interpreting the inspiration
wonderfully written!
Keep writing
Polly -
like it.
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thinking really IS a burden sometimes.....very nicely done, I enjoyed this a great deal....thanks for entering
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WOW i really like this one it is really really good. i love the imagery it is really great.this is one of the best poems i have read ever!!!!!! poems like this make me want to write more JUST like this!!!!!!!! Well anyways this is a really really great poem.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! my favorite part was-
"This thinking makes the lake murkier
Do not let the light to pass through
Sucks the life giving oxygen
Put of the flame inside." I REALLY LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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This is a very wondefully written poem. You did a marvelus job with writing it. Keep up the excellent work my fellow poet. I look forward to reading more from you when I get the chance. Remarkably done here, Thus, I must admit. Never quit writing no matter what anyone has to say and good luck to you and this contest you've entered into
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