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Just Live



There once was a bright, young boy
who thought and thought all day
and rarely joined his little friends
when they went out to play.
Even when he would come out,
his mind would keep on turning
and while all the others laughed and played,
his questions kept on burning.
Like "Where did I come from?  Why am I here?"
and "Where will I go when I die?"
Very big questions for such a small boy.
Unanswered, his childhood flew by.

A young man sat on a sunswept beach,
away and apart from the crowd.
You see, he was thinking quite serious thoughts
and their laughter was far too loud.
His nose in a book, he just couldn't hear
the young girls when they'd call out his name
and though the sun shone so very brightly above,
had no time for their foolish games.
No, there were too many doors to unlock
and so many knots to untie
like "Where did I come from?  Why am I here?"
and "Where will I go when I die?"

A middle aged man sat on the same beach,
a place he had come to know
as somewhere to ponder his life's many why's
though the answers he still didn't know,
when a feeling of emptiness, never so deep,
filled his heart and made him afraid.
He thought of the voices of friends, long ago,
but could only hear silence today.
Then he thought, "Oh, my God.  Half my life has slipped by
and still, no solution is near.
I think I'll stop trying to figure it out
and for once, just be glad that I'm here."
That day, his eyes opened and though nothing had changed,
the world became bright, rich and new.
And as he lay back to blend with life's colors and sounds,
the great sky never seemed quite so blue.

An old man lies on a bed, close to death,
but not worried, not sad or afraid.
He smiles at sweet faces, gathered around
saying, "Please Grandpa, don't go away."
He says, "Don't be sad.  I had a life full and rich -
something not many can say."
But their young eyes were still pleading, scared and confused
so he searched for the right words to say . . .

"When I was young, I had so many worries and fears
and questions I couldn't get by.
Then one day I stopped fighting and searching in vain
and decided to live till I die.
I traveled the world, drank in its wonders,
found true love in a good woman's eyes,
had beautiful children, life's sweetest reward.
Each one, an incredible prize.
Now, one journey ends and another begins
and I was right to be patient and wait
for the mysteries that plagued my troubled, young mind
can't be solved on this side of the gate.
So do one thing more for me.  Know your own beauty.
Always stand strong, proud and tall.
And think of my passing not as the end
but as the summer becoming the fall."




Author notes

For the contest requiring two golds or more - this poem has won three golds, but only one is recorded because the first one was before the site was altered to keep a record of all trophies. In the "olden days", it used to erase the previous contest when you entered another one.


This poem is about four stages in a man's life. It's somewhat autobiographical. I'm working on the third stage and the fourth is yet to be seen.

Thanks for visiting,

Mark
Written July 1st, 1989

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  • Yes indeed this is

    a very nice poem it looks for the answers and when not found it doesn't force having to have them, it just tells it like you see it, very will done

    One thing in this life that you can always be sure of ,.... and that is , You never know >

    • Very true. The only opinions I've ever trusted about the afterlife are those of people who have actually died and been through the tunnel, in the presence of the light, etc., but they all interpreted the light differently depending on their orientation on earth, as Jesus, Buddha, Allah, etc. And of course, scientists have "explained" it as the brain misfiring as it shuts down. But they can't explain the similarity between the accounts. It seems if the brain is misfiring, final thoughts would be like ridiculous, nonsensical dreams, not the same story from people all over the world. It's a mystery, that's for sure.

      Thanks,

      Mark
  • This amazing and beautiful. I love it. On a scale from one to ten I'd give it a 10! Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
    Megan

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    December 22, 2007

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    Very inspiring. This should make a lot of people pause and think about whether or not they are living... it really does get confusing youknow, deciding if we are living or existing isn't always easy. Of course, in today's society, there is a epidemic of happy addictions that make the emotion of life more like a curse than a blessing even though sadness and hardships are as much a part of living as happiness and bounty.

    Very thought provoking write. Best wishes always... ~Genie~

  • She Has My Heart
    May 24, 2007

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    Well, what can I say, what can I say that 80 comments haven't already said! I think you are one of my favourite poets and all round coolest people I have ever had the pleasure to come across, that might sound rather hasty, I have only read one poem, buy man, what a poem! Simply amazing, I loved it from start to finish, the story was brilliant, the rhyme, rhythm and flow flawless, the message exactly right. Bravo!

    x take care x

  • Yvette Champ
    March 8, 2006
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    A well written write with a parable imbued that each of us can learn from.This poetically and poignantly portrays how important it is to enjoy the moment of time that we are in.We all tend to question,look back or look forward,what we can benefit from is to enjoy the moment we have for what it is.What a lovely message within this.I have a friend who this could have been written about.A very studious child,who grew to be a deep thinking man.He still ponders the answers to everything and I tell him we may believe what comforts us but ultimately we won`t know for sure until we pass over and then all will be revealed.This write made me think of that great song by Nat King Cole,"Nature Boy" I thoroughly enjoyed this write and the poignancy and serenity it instilled within me.Excellent.Love and light,Yvette
  • Missin-Home
    March 8, 2006
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    When reading this poem i had to look at my own life and think that man there are people who just like me spend most of there time trying to answer the questions like "Why" when what we really need to be doing is living

  • March 8, 2006
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    You see, he was thinking quite serious thoughts
    and their laughter was far too loud.
    His nose in a book, he just couldn't hear

    what a thoughtful piece with deep meaning. time passes by really fast and you beautifully wrote it into this poem. thanks for touching me and writing this

  • Ishvara
    March 8, 2006
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    Brilliant

    This piece is nothing less than sheer brilliance, a great write with a clear and very valid message. The sentiment and the principles are great.

    Very well done.

  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    March 8, 2006
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    So do one thing more for me. Know your own beauty.
    Always stand strong, proud and tall.
    And think of my passing not as the end
    but as the summer becoming the fall."

    undoubtedly great and immortal words here..


  • Sierra
    March 8, 2006
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    YES

    Brilliant! Usually rhyming poems sounds silly and forced, but this flow was perfect,a dn the message was beautiful. I have nothing to say, no critique whatsoever really, this poem was superb.

  • Justinez
    March 8, 2006
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    Wow this write is fantastic! Flowed so well and has the basis of many limericks put together.... Not that this is like a limerick but each verse, but a 5 line verse of rhyme, hope you understand me. I really enjoyed this and one of the better writes I've seen here on AP... Keep up the good work I'm sure there's more to come! x x x

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    March 8, 2006
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    Thanks, Michelle. Glad I could oblige! lol I hope you're doing well these days. Always nice to hear from you.

    Mark

  • Cupcrazy gold member
    March 8, 2006
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    This is quite beautifully written, the images and flow are excellent and I love the way each stage can stand on it's own. Excellent write!

  • heartnsoul
    March 8, 2006
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    opps....thought I checked the box!

  • heartnsoul
    March 8, 2006
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    Ah..these are the writes I came to know and love! The softer, gentler side of you. Although, I still read my favorite from time to time. More so now during the winter months. Still makes a gloomy day bright and cheerful!
    ~Michelle~
  • Veil of Winter
    March 8, 2006
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    Very good. It all had a wonderful flow to it, and the message was clear. You're right; we should just be happy to be here. Every day is a gift, isn't it? Amazing. Nice job.

  • Viyanna Rosemarie
    March 8, 2006
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    Then he thought, "Oh, my God. Half my life has slipped by
    and still, no solution is near.
    I think I'll stop trying to figure it out
    and for once, just be glad that I'm here."

    i really like the way you have used your words here. thank you for sharing your talent with me today. viyanna r langager

  • Ankeeta silver member
    January 15, 2006
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    uhmm you have shown these four stages very smoothly ..am afraid life isnt like a heaven!
    but i love the way you have potrayed one view of how a man lives
    keep going

  • Piccola gold member
    December 15, 2005
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    Wonderful. The flow and everything were all great. And the message too was really cool. I posted one this morning .. it's called tears, maybe you'd read it if you get the time.
    allpoetry.com/Poem/1697571 thanks again for the reads and the comments.

  • Legend silver member
    November 10, 2005
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    Mark I have to say this is one of the finest pieces I have read on this site,One that any poet, who thinks they are a poet would be proud to call their own.A wonderful wander through the mind of a boy to man. And an example of all the good that life can offer if one takes it and uses it in the right way.
    Oh how years are wasted by some worrying about things they have little control over.As the saying goes Get a life,your wasting this one. Great job a wonderful read,Sorry but you still only get one applause
    Edited on Nov 10, 2:20 because ''.

  • NoWayJo
    November 9, 2005
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    no, "Ideals" is a different series of publications, Mark. I think they publish a few issues throughout the year, one for the year and then special issues for the holidays, Easter and Thanksgiving, etc. I'll see what I can find out for you on this. I know I have copies of this publication at home that are unavailable to me here, but I'll see what I can dig up and let you know.

    in the meantime, I'll definitely look for your poem Gratitude in the "Chicken Soup" collection. my Mom has a lot of these "Chicken Soup" books, so I'll see if she has a copy.

    Jo

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    November 9, 2005
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    Hi Jo,

    A poem of mine called Gratitude is in a book called Chicken Soup to Inspire the Body and Soul. Was that the series you were referring to or is there another one I should know about?

    Thanks,

    Mark

  • NoWayJo
    November 9, 2005
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    actually when reading this last night, I was going to leave comment as to the "Chicken Soup for the Soul" series of books. There is also an Ideals series of publications that you may wish to look into. I know my Mom had subscribed to that publication for years, and you may already be familiar, and this poem has the same appeal as so much of the writing there.
    I know I have copies of Ideals issues at home which are unavailable to me here, but you may find further information about them on the web...

    It really is a beautiful poem, and is meant to be shared with many.

    Jo

  • autumnsong
    November 9, 2005
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    i like your poem...

    i agree with you...i mean, by just living, you can enjoy your life far better than when you try and confine yourself to doing only one thing (ie. looking for the purpose of your life).

    by just living, you find more answers to unanswerable questions than by spending your whole life looking for the answers. if you just let go, the answers will come to you.

    your poem was also well written and quite catchy. it deserves to be in an internationally acclaimed book. like self-help books and other books of the sort that help others in their lives.

    i think this is one of my favorite poems here in allpoetry...

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    November 9, 2005
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    Thanks, Jo. It almost made it into one of the Chicken Soup books but didn't make the final cut. Each book starts with about 5000, then they whittle it down to 200, but only 101 gets into each book. It was in the last 200 but it got the ax at the final moment. I think it was probably because it reflects agnostic thinking and their books have a Christian bent. But it's always been one of my personal favorites because it was one of the first poems I ever wrote, and one of the first I shared with others and discovered the power of the written word. I've been hooked ever since. lol

    Thanks again. It's always nice to see your name on my pages.

    Mark

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    November 9, 2005
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    Thanks, Shancy.

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    November 9, 2005
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    "Years are never wasted, merely spent differently than could have been." Couldn't have said it better myself. I featured another one today called "On Looking Through Old Photographs" and that was its basic message. I think a little cosmic synchronicity is happening here! lol

    Thanks,

    Mark

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    November 9, 2005
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    rose2005

    I'm afraid I can't recall where I got the inspiration. I wrote this about 15 years ago. Thanks for your kind words and encouragement. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

    Mark

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    November 9, 2005
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    Grossmutti,

    Exactly . . . live until you die. The perfect summary. lol

    Thanks,

    Mark

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    November 9, 2005
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    twistedchic,

    I wrote this so long ago, I can't recall what the original inspiration was. I think it was one of those poems that come from out of nowhere, but I recall writing it in a bit of a trance, like it was being written through me. Thanks for letting me know you enjoyed it.

    Mark

  • CountryCousin
    November 8, 2005
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    Written well.

    Mark this is simply a wonderful poem that I will bookmark to come back to applaud. I truly enjoyed everything that has been written here.

  • nichtmich silver member
    November 8, 2005
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    Exquisite

    Bravo!!! This is absolutely superb. A great story (poem), flowing with rich ideas revolving around one little kernel of unquestionable truth "live until you die"

  • Deathisjstthebging silver member
    November 8, 2005
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    Powerful....

    Bravo!! Magnificent piece and gives many thoughts to ponder...
    Beautiful words to grace the soul...and chicken soup for those who feel cold... Definitely powerful statements you have penned~
    Thank you for sharing such a heartwarming autobiography!!!
    DIJTB
  • Karrat
    November 8, 2005
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    awesome

    This poem is awesome. it reminds me of "the Giving Tree" by shel silverstein, one of my favorite books.

  • November 8, 2005
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    Don't count the years - count the memories

    If you woke up this morning
    with more health than illness,
    you are more blessed than the
    million who won't survive the week.
    If you have food in your refrigerator,
    clothes on your back, a roof over
    your head and a place to sleep,
    you are richer than 75% of this world.
    If you hold up your head with a smile
    on your face and are truly thankful,
    you are blessed because the majority can,
    but most do not.
    If you can read this message,
    you are more blessed than over
    two billion people in the world
    that cannot read anything at all.
    You are so blessed in ways
    you may never even know.
    A blessing cannot be kept. If it stops with you, then the blessing will disappear. The blessing will only keep working if it is continuously passed around. If you are a recipient of a blessing, keep the blessing working by being the source of blessing to other people. So Dear Love to other and just live.

  • NoWayJo
    November 8, 2005
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    you so beautifully captured a lifetime and a life's lesson in this poem Mark. this was written so very smoothly and feels so polished, and the message is eloquent and clear! really excellent writing!

    Jo

  • Shancy Fayre
    November 8, 2005
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    This is so filled with wisdom and so well written, I could just
    see it in print. This is a wonderful work. I loved it. Shancy.

  • Kestryl
    November 8, 2005
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    Then he thought, "Oh, my God. Half my life has slipped by
    and still, no solution is near.
    I think I'll stop trying to figure it out
    and for once, just be glad that I'm here."

    Sometimes it takes far too long to get to that realization, doesnt it? But years are never wasted, merely spent differently than could have been. Wonderful poem, good luck in the contest

  • rosepoet
    November 8, 2005
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    amazing write!!!! Although it seems as though this was penned a few years back-it still holds the magic it did back then. One of those timeless pieces.This is the best poem i have read on this SITE so far! it is soo beautiful! where did you get the inspiration for this!
    check poem "mother" thank you.

  • Mystical-Gardenia
    November 8, 2005
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    Excellent... magnficent wisdoms embroidered i

    Excellent!! The wisdom woven in words of eloquent simplicity are generous tokens to the message therein... truly a delightful read... ... Memorable lines... " And think of my passing not as the end
    but as the summer becoming the fall." Truly a master piece Well done Wishing you and yours much success in all of your endeavors

    Edited on Nov 08, 5:44 p.m. because 'spelling'.

  • Thinking About It
    November 8, 2005
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    AMAZING!!!

    This is the best poem i have read on this SITE so far! it is soo beautiful! where did you get the inspiration for this!

  • Marissa Ann Scott
    November 8, 2005
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    A definite gold!

    When I read it I paused and it did strike me that it might be autobiographical!!!

    This piece is candid and frighteningly applicable to so many people's lives. I felt that way a tad in college till I was in my final year. That's when it hit that I needed needed needed to start seeking my soulmate. (When I find him, I'll let ya know tho, lol!) and I began to really let the opposite sex into my life. Before that I was always too busy, studying, pondering... questioning.

    Truly, life is simply to be lived. Mark, I hope you never look back on any moment of your life with remorse. There are so many that were cruelly denied by others the chance to even have life, to have been born.

    May you find the fourth stage.

    P.S. There's this dude called Lawrence Kholberg whose stages of moral development really has interest me. You can check him out if you haven't already run across his research findings and theories.

    Great write! Yup... I think you're going onto my favourites list!

    Marissa.

  • Marissa Ann Scott
    November 8, 2005
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    A definite gold!

    When I read it I paused and it did strike me that it might be autobiographical!!!

    This piece is candid and frighteningly applicable to so many people's lives. I felt that way a tad in college till I was in my final year. That's when it hit that I needed needed needed to start seeking my soulmate. (When I find him, I'll let ya know tho, lol!) and I began to really let the opposite sex into my life. Before that I was always too busy, studying, pondering... questioning.

    Truly, life is simply to be lived. Mark, I hope you never look back on any moment of your life with remorse. There are so many that were cruelly denied by others the chance to even have life, to have been born.

    May you find the fourth stage.

    P.S. There's this dude called Lawrence Kholberg whose stages of moral development really has interest me. You can check him out if you haven't already run across his research findings and theories.

    Great write! Yup... I think you're going onto my favourites list!

    Marissa.

  • Marissa Ann Scott
    November 8, 2005
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    A definite gold!

    When I read it I paused and it did strike me that it might be autobiographical!!!

    This piece is candid and frighteningly applicable to so many people's lives. I felt that way a tad in college till I was in my final year. That's when it hit that I needed needed needed to start seeking my soulmate. (When I find him, I'll let ya know tho, lol!) and I began to really let the opposite sex into my life. Before that I was always too busy, studying, pondering... questioning.

    Truly, life is simply to be lived. Mark, I hope you never look back on any moment of your life with remorse. There are so many that were cruelly denied by others the chance to even have life, to have been born.

    May you find the fourth stage.

    P.S. There's this dude called Lawrence Kholberg whose stages of moral development really has interest me. You can check him out if you haven't already run across his research findings and theories.

    Great write! Yup... I think you're going onto my favourites list!

    Maissa.

  • cutiepie gold member
    November 8, 2005
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    Excellent

    Mark, this was delightful..It told the tale of a young man's life but it could have been the life of anyone. All could relate to it's words with ease. It makes a nice change to read something that does not take hours of contemplation to understand. As I have remarked before, you have an easy way with words that is most enjoyable. Many congratulations

  • Vickie J
    November 8, 2005
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    Although it seems as though this was penned a few years back-it still holds the magic it did back then. One of those timeless pieces. I can't justify this with any words of my own, so let me just let a simple "I loved this" suffice. One of the best things I have read on this site.~vj

  • glispa
    November 8, 2005
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    a beautiful message ,one can ponder the meaning of their life and STILL live and enjoy it through the experience of life we know life, great write

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    September 14, 2005
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    Thanks, Robert.

    This is one of my old favorites. I don't get comments on it very often. Thanks for digging it up! Glad you liked it.

    Mark

  • Methodic Breakdown
    September 14, 2005
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    great!

    Wow! This is one of my favorite poems so far here on AP. I've been on here for a while, and I've read several of your poems, but I've never commented on them. You are one of the best writers I've seen thus far. Keep up the great work! I'm going to start reading the rest of your work!
    ~Robert

  • lencio-sunchild gold member
    June 29, 2005
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    A very promising write. Deep with a wonderful thought behind every verse. Like my blend of two poems put together "Choose life and Tomorrow's dreams" I think all of us a little children have these thoughts as to "Where did I come from? Why am I here?"
    and "Where will I go when I die?" and then we understand the meaning and the purpose of our existence to tell the answers as we progress in age. Excellent write. Just as most of yours is. I guess one thing is common among is, if you will agree is the language used, the flow, very spontaneaous, as if tell a story. I agree with you that is how it should be. No incomprehensible language or phrasing which doesnt make sense at all like many of the works on this site.

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    January 13, 2005
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    Hi Sharon,

    Thanks so much for your comment on this and the others today. I think very highly of you so I'm very honored to be your favorite poet. I'm sorry you had a troubled childhood. I guess most poets do, which is what drives them to write. I hope everything keeps getting better and better for you from now on. You deserve it.

    Thanks again,

    Mark

  • SharonLynn
    January 12, 2005
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    Wow. This was the most beautiful poem of yours that I have read so far. It really touched me. I actually have asked myself the same questions over and over as a child.....Abusive families and such kind of do that to you. You are the most talented poet I know and you are by far my favorite.....I just love everything you write but a few of them just touch me deeper than the others. Wonderfully written, beautiful job.
    ~Sharon~

  • loualoui
    December 19, 2004
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    If this has won three gold trophies... then I can absolutely see why!
    A brilliant piece... deserving of at least 10 gold trophies!
    Guess who made his way into my favourites tonight!

    Good night!

    ~ Louise ..xx

  • dp robertson
    August 15, 2004
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    Congrats!
  • surfermike
    August 12, 2004
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    well written and a good story
    congrats
    mike

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    August 11, 2004
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    Thanks Fraon,

    This is a continuing theme with my work. "It's a bit long but . . ." lol

    I see this as a story poem which attempts to illustrate the gradual progression of change in the main character more than just a "definition of something". Otherwise, I just would have written. "Don't worry about the big questions of life. Just enjoy yourself." But that would have been a little less interesting to read.

    Anyway, thanks for the comment, and the encouragement.

    Mark

  • Fraon
    August 11, 2004
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    The poem was good, a little long for a deffinition of something. But I saw your point. Nice write.

    Fraon

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    August 7, 2004
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    Messenger Bird,

    Saying something I wrote was something you "really needed to hear" is the ultimate compliment for me. Connecting honestly is what it's all about, after all. Thanks.

    Mark

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    August 7, 2004
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    Hi angeliciceangel,

    (I love that nickname, by the way. What a nice image!) As I mentioned to MT above, I tortured myself for quite a while with a lot of "big" questions which, even if I knew the answers to, probably wouldn't alter my life very much. I mean, we all need to go to work tomorrow anyway, right? lol

    Thanks for your kind comments.

    Best wishes,

    Mark

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    August 7, 2004
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    Hey MT,

    Wow! Thanks for the long and thoughtful response. The story of you and your girlfriend is an inspiring one. I like old sayings as well, and one of my favorites is, "'Tis better to have loved and lost, then never to have loved at all." And you're so right - all we can do is the best we can do. What others do is beyond our control and our happiness must be based on something more substantial than the whims of others or it will never have a steady foundation.

    I respect your belief in God and don't intend to sound atheistic in this poem. I guess I'm a bit on the agnostic side, allowing it all to be a mystery for the sake of my own peace of mind, but praying just in case it's all just as the good book says. lol I find solace in prayer, too, as long as I can shut down the Dr. Spock side of my brain that doubts everything I can't detect with my physical senses.

    Thanks again for dropping by. Your comments gave me a lot of food for thought.

    All the best,

    Mark

  • asinnerliketherest
    August 7, 2004
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    Aside from believing in God, there are two things that I believe in firmly, which are really two parts in one: carpe diem (cease the day) and that we must live for life.

    I'll never forget the Dead Poet's Society. . . For much of my life I have been a shy, keeping to myself boy with low self-esteem and low confidence. For much of this time the only one I felt comfortable turning to was God or the occasional time my mother. . . Then I discovered a passion to speak and was an active participant in speech contests. But, it wasn't until drama that I realized how great working with people can be. . . How valuable friends can be. How "Wild at Heart" (awesome must read novel) I could be. . . I found a passion for the arts: to write, to learn new languages, to speak. . . And now to make friends from all over the world and discuss culture and politics and learn things you can't just learn in books. . .

    I'll never forget that OAC exam either - for the sight passage on the exam it was an article where a professor was arguing that television cannot replace literature because it does not allow us to use our brains actively and therefore live life. . . The romance you get from a piece of literature of living an adventure. . . of exercising your imagination as you follow characters on their quests. . . That's real. The ultimate escape from reality. And the parallel idea in the article with that was that we should live for life. . . If we let ourselves get caught up in the worries of life, if we always think about death, and about unanswered questions we miss everything that matters and gain nothing. But, life isn't necessarily about gaining. It's about everything. Let it come as it may, do not dwell on one thing your whole life, but don't ignore what's important in life either. . . And always always go with your passions. . . Carpe diem -> go for it! If you want to do something in your heart and soul go for it! (P.S. It took me four years before I carpe diemed and asked a certain girl if she'd be my girlfriend, and you know, after high school it becomes very difficult to hang onto those friends you had. . . I nearly lost her. . . But by some miracle she got a hold of me again and our friendship became even stronger. . . Now it seems like so often our lives are on different paths. . . That she has her goals, I have mine. . . And quite honestly she doesn't see a future right now. . . And as a guy. . . To hear that. . . It sucks. . . Because I know for myself and for most of the guys I know, we see them as our future, you know? And it's hard. . . but girls are like that. . . And that's why it is so important to live for now. . . because if she came to me tomorrrow and said she wanted to break up with me what can I do? I love her so much that I have to let her go if that's what she wants. . .There's a beautiful saying about that: "If you love something than set it free. If it comes back to you than it will be yours forever, if not than it was never really yours." I'll never regret asking her to be my girlfriend because it came from my heart. I just went for it and there is no better feeling than that. . . There is nothing quite like it, when you put your heart on the line and just go for it. . . Btu that's one of the hardest things I think for guys to overcome. . . the fear of rejection, of not being good enough. . . but in the end, we have to just go for it. . . Find the women in the girl, live the life, adventure and all, prepare to share that with her and in the end it won't matter when you die, just so long as you know you lived ( and yes I believe that includes living for God).


  • luckhole
    August 6, 2004
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    oh, sniff sniff, you bring a tear to my tired eye. i think everyone has at some point fallen into the "why" trap of life, and i applaud your successful escape from it. it all becomes so clear when we stop looking for answers and are free to see all that lies in front of us, to just live until we die, a simple why-less path through life, and even beyond it. when i noticed the repetiton in the 2nd stanza i thought this would turn out to be a beautiful eulogy, and one anyone would be immensely proud of. this is one amazing piece of poetry, thank you for sharing it.

  • Jcsketch82 gold member
    August 6, 2004
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    Nicely done

    Mark Rickerby
    this is very well written, I love the images and what you have to say. Thnk you for posting in my humble contest, and I wish you the best...
    Truely Jc
  • angeliciceangel
    August 6, 2004
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    wonderfully writen, and i enjoy how it sometimes expresses the fears that you have when you grow up and the many 'whys' that are never answered. Best of luck in the contest

  • Night Hope gold member
    July 18, 2004
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    elegance redefined

    Wow. I was sitting over on the other side of the beach, Mark...thought I saw you there...ah! pensive, contemplative souls...so many unanswered questions; yet, we must continue to ask them & follow the answers they ultimately give to our Hearts...Mark...very impressive; I got chills...'twas NOT the AC kicking in...your Friend...swan
  • Messenger Bird
    May 1, 2004
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    wow... really really great writing. And something I really needed to hear. Thank you so much for entering.. Best wishes.

  • SegerFan
    April 28, 2004
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    this poem was so descriptive it kept me engrossed right to the beautiful end

  • MariGoes gold member
    February 17, 2004
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    How is with your book? I can't wait to read it!
    If here with your poems you keep amazing us with those wonderful writes, the book will be a heaven's gift!
    This poem makes me thing on Gibran's thoughts, so deep and so peaceful! I loved the last part!

    Mari

  • teardrop gold member
    January 13, 2004
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    What an amazing talent you have. This is absolutly great and well deserved first place. Congrats!!!

    TD

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    January 13, 2004
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    Hi David,

    Thanks, buddy. I really liked your poem for this contest, too, as you know.

    I don't think I could judge a contest because every poem has so much virtue, though presented in different ways. The only contest I had was one SilentPoet and I did challenging people to write the worst love poem they could write. But a contest with "real" poems on a heavy topic? It must have been a daunting task for Naena.

    Thanks again for the congrats.

    Mark

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    January 13, 2004
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    Hi Naena,

    Thanks so much for giving me 1st place among all these amazing poems. It means a lot to me. I love your sign-off - "May your pens be blessed and your tales be many!" The perfect writer's toast!

    Thanks again (and sorry for not IM'ing you when I entered. I figured you would do a final check when the contest was about to close, and I guess I was right, luckily for me!

    Happy writing,

    Mark
    Edited on Jan 13, 9:54 p.m. because '-'.

  • PurpleSky
    January 13, 2004
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    This was realy awsome I love how you told the story from young until old and with age also showed growth mentaly. You did a great job at helping the reader to understand that life is not what you need to know but what you can discover
  • ardanach
    January 13, 2004
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    Awesome write! It has a good lesson to be learned.

  • naena
    January 13, 2004
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    Congrats on your win! I hope you don't mind a little promotion! Naena

  • dp robertson
    January 13, 2004
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    Told you it was a great piece, well deserved win, well done, I would have voted for this too

    David

  • naena
    January 13, 2004
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    How did I miss this? Why didn't you IM me? I'm so glad that I double checked all the entries today! What a brilliant tale and sharing of wisdom! I enjoyed watching the story unfold...frowning when he shut himself away from life, and the teary-eyed smiles when he embraced it. Very, very well done! Thanks so much for sharing! Naena

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    December 15, 2003
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    Thanks, David

    I'm glad you liked this one. It's my personal favorites because I said exactly what I wanted to, which is my only goal when writing. Thanks for the encouragement.

    Mark

  • dp robertson
    December 14, 2003
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    This is wonderful work. What a great writier you are. This is such a good piece of writing that takes the reader with them all the way. It has a good heart that beats all the way through it. This is great, thank you for sharing it.

    David

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    November 13, 2003
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    Hi Rixi,

    Thanks for the critique. I find that most poets do relate to this one. After all, poetry is often about tackling the BIG questions.

    I'm guessing that you're from Australia. I don't think I've ever received a "good on ya." Thanks!

    All the best,

    Mark
  • rixi
    November 12, 2003
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    this was written when i was 2 dont that make ya feel old lol, nah, i really liked this poem, as SP said, it's very wisdomy and full of meaning. I can admit I actually think along the lines of, why am i here, is there any point blah blah blah. If you've done the third stage good on you. It was easy to read so yay! and though wisdomy (i shud use real words shudnt i) i completely understood it, normally when people use wisdom they put it in code so it takes u til u die to figure it out... pointless if u ask me, which u didn't so ill shusht it now. excellent poem, loved it liked it and understood it

    ~rixi~

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    October 22, 2003