a snow-capped mountain
standing gallant and brave
hiding deaths of fools who
should have known better
brimming in avalanches
basking in worldly praise
carrying a freezing flag, like
an answer to Frosty’s prayer.
sunlight reflected into heaven
by the white tears that froze-
seeking worldly fame and luring
fools into meaningless deaths.
A contest entry
- Twelve lines on or from this Mountain, by Lyndon.
1000 points, ended November 26, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A poem on a mountain.
A good poem. You did repeat yourself, in meaning, in stanzas one and two.
Thank you for entering this contest and good fortune.
Lyndon of the Winklings.
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BRAVO!
this was a great poem charu! the descriptions didn't seem to have a limit!
and its great in this case coz its abt mount everest! a great creation by mother nature!
Mt. everest is simply amazing with its beauty! its gorgeous with that frozen ice on the top... it somehow lookes like and upside down cone with ice cream on the wrong end... hehe Just the look of it in pictures makes u feel as tho u r there and u can feel the cool breeze and refreshed!
Anyways... this poem made me feel that way a lil... only i kinda didn't understand the fool part.... anyhoo! amazing job! best of luck in the contest k!
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Oooh... everest in a barely broken nutshell - great work here doll!
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I like the picture you paint of the defiant mountain mocking them.
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