How feeble life is,
how easily fragmented.
Just as glass shatters when hit,
so too does the antiquity of humans
shatter the faith in ourselves.
Lost trust and lost hopes…
Simple dreams mangled in the midst
Of hell and war;
along with hearts and limbs.
Life is lived in shards
of broken pasts and tormenting futures.
Yet people live happily.
They clean up their adulterated pasts
and progressively look onward
from each broken day to the next.
Each hoping the next shard
is more pleasant than the last.
A contest entry
- Round One of Five by Kei-Aira.
450 points, ended February 5, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - round one; [&my weakness is that i care too much♥] by innocence jaded.xx.
1200 points, ended January 18, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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very nice
how is it possible that i never read this? but i really really like it!! great job, cuz!
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Amazing. I liked this poem a whole hellova lot. Your vocabulary was extensive, metaphors were amazing, and basically every word of this was amazing. Thank you for entering & welcome to the finalists. (: -
*jaw hanging open*
this poem has reduced
my vocabulary to ew's , ah's
wow's and sighs.....
Remarkable write
Best wishes in the contest
I have missed reading you
~Pastel
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This was a great piece you penned here. This spoke out in high volume. The flow is perfect and the imagery is grand. Great job and wonderful message penned here. Thanks for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet.
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Yet people live happily.
They clean up their adulterated pasts
and progressively look onward
from each broken day to the next.
Each hoping the next shard
is more pleasant than the last.
love thta paragraph, really true and amazing. you've described life just the wya it is, full of shattered pieces that makes us whole and yet incomplete. good writing!
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I really enjoyed this poem... a simple piece that gets to the point, and I think the imagery is beautiful. Another fantastic piece! Good job!
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I agree. This is wonderful. Your language is so simple yet beautiful. Easy to read once and really grasp the concept. I love this!
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Wowzer!!
A fantastic piece, I love the imagery you have portrayed in it. I can see why it inspired a contest, fab idea! Superbly penned as always
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