What can I say but, "I'm sorry for it all."?
Taking your happiness and letting it fall.
I was so careful, as if holding sand,
but then the grains start falling through my hand.
As I try to grab and catch each grain,
they turn to your tears and fall like rain.
Each glistening tear mirrors on me,
millions of monsters for me to see.
I've ripped my soul with heinous acts
and stand trial and jury in front of facts.
Exhibit A is a mere pile of sand.
B? A piece of you missing from my hand.
You gave me your heart to be treated with care
but here I stand holding nothing but air
Reminiscing what it was like to feel you there.
In a pool of mud and scattered sand
I lack the courage to even stand.
Destroyed my memories, most cherished, of you,
fading with each new corrupt thing I do.
Digging a hole till it's become a pit,
and I'm without help to get out of it.
In darkness I lay to silently cry,
cannot see for sand tears in my eye.
Blindly I crawl feeling all cracks and creases,
hoping that one day I pick up all the pieces.
But I drop more than I can collect
and slowly your face disappears, I regret.
Will you soon be just a name and pain?
If so, I think I may go insane.
I cannot sleep, I cannot even eat.
So weary, so tired, so completely beat.
I'd have, and still would, do anything for you.
The lengths I'd go to fix it all...
.... if you only knew.
Neigh! Given up on, left confused,
wondering if I've kept God bemused.
Played enough, had Your fill?
It doesn't seem like You ever will.
Why wouldn't You help me no matter the prayer?
Does Your silence mean that You don't care?
....
If you wish, I CAN do it all.
This time I won't let your heart fall.
Rekindle our flame to burn white hot
and with artist's hands I will not
stop burning your sand heart until
satisfied, and my hands can fill
with a perfect blown glass heart.
Somehow, maybe, that would be a start.
Glass may be fragile but at least it's whole
and your whole heart, my dear, is my goal.
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This is the only poem I'm going to be focusing on for awhile I think. It's not where I want it, it needs to be more. It hasn't yet reached anywhere near how I'm feeling or what I'm trying to convey. I will perfect this poem. If your heart didn't break reading this then it's not finished because mine is.
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this is some beautiful work. i wish that when i hurt i could write it out as beautiful as you always seem to do. i am a poet, yes..but you are like the father of all beautiful words. i know everyone writes differently but you sir are the best.
i know what this feels like..you just explain it better than i can.
You gave me your heart to be treated with care
but here I stand holding nothing but air
Reminiscing what it was like to feel you there.
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Excellent. I like it a lot. Very good at rhyming.
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thats pwoerful stuff man..I love it..I can totally relate.
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always a joy to read, you do a great job portraying whats on your mind or somewhere close, either way, painting us a picture that we can use to understand.
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Wow,it really touched me...loved the visuals and imagery...
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this is exceptional,so much emotion. My heart felt like it was being broken then ripped out. Yet i felt so responsable for it...very good write very deep!Nice flow as well !!!
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a heart is very fragile and when it brakes or even cracks it is hard to get over beilieve me i know i hope you get everything out while you can because its really hard to even stop thinking about heartacke when you keep it all bottled up inside you. i loved it very good work.
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I can see that there is still so much you have left to say. My heart was aching but don't take it the wrong way my heart has already been broken. Not much else that anyone or anything can do. I hope you can get all of it out before it kills you.
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this was so full of emotion. its an incredible poem i cant wait to see it when its done. i hope your ok
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Destroyed my memories, most cherished, of you,
fading with each new corrupt thing I do.
I know that you know what I'm going to say. Excellent, isn't it?
Well, I have something else in mind to tell you.
What I liked alot about this was a constant beat as if some song was playing in the background as you wrote this and you formed your lines with the same beat. It was constant throughout - and that's a good thing.
Secondly, "It hasn't yet reached anywhere near how I'm feeling or what I'm trying to convey."
Sometimes words become insufficient in almost every way. Either its when you're trying to describe something or what you're feeling ... or even when someone is trying to give you advice - those words reflect off because they don't mean a thing.
That's mainly what poetry is about - trying to get your feelings in words. It can never be done in one poem ... and sometimes not even in a thousand. That's why we keep writing until it all goes away, we've moved on .. and the feeling is totally different - so we all have to start from scratch all over again.
This poem is as good as it stands - I can only imagine how you're going to better it.
All my love
Never ♥
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Well I know that sometimes you just can't find the words, I've come across that all too often, but if you know half as well as I think you do then you'd know that that just doesn't cut it for me. I must get it RIGHT! and so it shall be. If I can't do anything else right in my life, then goddamn if I'm not going to get my poetry right.
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Don't worry babes ... Things get better, at least they say that they do...
What I normally think is that we get used ot existence and so deal with it in our own way. You-re already working hard on yourself ... it'll be right, alright.
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i was able to feel the heartache and pain but i dont quite know how to put this but it still seems to be missing something at the end to me i dont quite know how to explain it. and i understand my heart is broken as well. it takes a while for a broken heart to heal
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I think the main reason you noticed the ending isn't right is because it's unfinished by far. This is just where I left off when I couldn't write anymore so I posted what I had. Thank you.
-Nick
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