Blink
Open your eyes
The world is chaos
Blink
Peace restores
Love embraces all
Blink
Death and hatred surrounding
Devils dancing
Blink
Nightmares come to life
No escape
Blink
Hold it long
Create your own world
Don't open your eyes
For it will fade away into chaos
A contest entry
- Think Abstract by Jfd.
600 points, ended November 29, 2007, 14 entries
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Will you give me an honest opinion?
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wow, i really like this the repetition of "blink" in every stanza. it's very true, our world is constantly changing. one minute we can see it as one way, and in the blink of an eye our entire perspective can chang. a great piece
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I think this poem is very true. Our world does change right before our very eyes. Great job!
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Thanks
Thank you for all the comments!
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to be honest, this didn't do much for me, I don't really like the repetition of "blink" also the use of the word chaos twice....the reader already knows the world is chaos from the first stanza...."nightmares come to life" seemed a bit cliche for me....I did like the image of "Death and hatred surrounding
Devils dancing"
Please don't get discouraged, it is not my intention to make people feel bad, just my honest opinion, and I am only one person....thank you for entering! -
Wow!
Really like this one too! It makes a whole lot of sense.
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