I am beckened to your call
I struggle to resist,
fall upon my knees
blow a gentle kiss.
So many battles I have lost
you still call out my name,
I can't face the disappointment
I turn away in shame.
I am not deserving of your love
I am not a perfect soul,
tortured by the struggle;
it has taken quite a tole.
Sometimes I feel angry
at all the souls you have missed,
while they go on ther merry way;
no calling to resist.
I envy them their freedom
no conscience to scream their name,
no right or wrong to answer to
for them there is no blame.
For me every thought is living
my every action known,
quilt is overwhelming;
I fear I am never going home.
Author notes
YOU NEVER GIVE UP GOD DOESN'T
A contest entry
- Christian Fruit by RisingTideofChrist.
650 points, ended May 19, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Well done!
I'd not change this poem one bit! Congrats on that previous win - well deserved! Lovely piece; really brings out the emotion, the drama, the struggle...
Well done!
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This gave me chills
I dont know what else to say. Your words beautiful, effortless, and powerful - I was stunned by how your message came slowly yet swiftly, gently yet firmly. I was moved.
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This is exactly how i feel!!!!!!
I really needed something to relate to and you gave it to me. Thank you
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Awesome
I can totally relate to what this poem is saying. i mean growing up and especially now going through high school i am going through times where i do see everyone so worry and care free about their actions, and it tares me up inside because some of those people are my friends who i couldn't imagine living without. And yes i do care about all my actions and thoughts because that is the way it is meant for me to be by Gods planning. very great write though and i would change nothing about it.
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This is truely poetry at it's best.You have a inique way and style all your own.Your feelings are well put.Very true to my heart.Your thoughts on this subject are well placed and it is easy for the reader to know exactly what you are saying.
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thank you for your comment, I really don't recieve too many comments. thank you. I would say God bless you but I believe you already have Gods blessings
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