checking your identity
in a frozen mirror
of my memory
see me behind your eyes
see me laughing with you
see me belly dancing in my skanky tops
flared bottoms
let me lead you from this caustic world
let me make your life one worth living
let me be your pillar
your tower of strength
rising on before you
you are endowed with beauty
with a cloud of light
with an amusing twist to your smile
that hints of things unsaid
you have power enough
to rule this world
to let the insipid drones
fall before you
Author notes
Written October 20th, 2003
A contest entry
- October New Members- "Chin Up" Poetry Contest - Hosted by The AllPoetry Greeter Staff by CookieZeal.
300 points, ended November 3, 2003, 22 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Seeing how you look to other people, and how they can look through you to see themselves. Great write! I love your stuff brooke!
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very nice poem. it's very descriptive and powerful. it shows a lot of strength, and that is a great message to be sending out. great write, keep it up
-disturbed -
A good, strong message within your words.
Thank you for entering and welcome to Allpoetry
~Von~ -
a great wish for hope
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Oops..Sorry. I wanted to thank you as well for entering!!! And Welcome to AllPoetry!
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Oh, yeeeeeees! I really like this. The images are sharp and the thoughts vivid. Concrete and firm!
Word Use- I like it when I see the string of words in a camouflage setting. Not forced or used for the sake of, if you know what I mean. You did very well with that part.
Title- Very Strong!
Excellent writing approaches, especially in the end. -
Excellent!!!
This poem is just beautiful, descriptive, flowing, and inspirationa l as well...Welco meto AP and good luck -
Showing someone they can be stronger if they want I enjoyed!!
Good luck
Lakota x -
well done poet, i hope that you are seeing the person on the inside and wishing that one to come forth, and not wishing to change someone to meet you standards. I wish you much luck..
peace be with & blessed be;
shaggy wolf
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