At times in everyone's lifetime,
there are steps that we must take,
there are lines that we must finally cross,
decisions we must make.
And that time has come for me, my Dear,
be it a long time overdue,
to air what lies within this heart of mine
for the woman I've found in you.
Yes, I've written you so many poems
where those feelings were implied,
but I've yet to actually say those words
despite how hard I've tried,
for oft I feared in doing so
you would turn and walk away,
leaving the broken man I was before
you finally came my way.
I feared that with your history
that you never would again
allow your heart open up once more,
and let another man in,
that a wall had been built around your heart
to protect yourself from the pain
that you've suffered in past relationships
so that you'd never be hurt again.
So I've written you 7 poems,
in my effort to let you know
and slowly wear away those walls you've built,
as in the story of Jericho,
where the people marched for 7 days
in their effort to breach those walls
and when on the 7th day the trumpets sound,
the fortification falls.
And I pray that this be that 7th day
and that final trumpet blast
that will topple the walls around your heart
and let me in at last.
So I purse my lips, the trumpet poised,
for what's been so overdue,
and finally air what lies within my heart...
I've fallen in love with you.
Author notes
BananaFoster: Option#4 (Most Trophies)
I guess this is my personal favortie because it comes from a real life situation where I had actually fallen in love with someone who had been hurt and mistreated so many times by the men in her past that she had built a wall around her heart so as not be hurt again. And the poem in itself is true also. I did write a series of 7 poems for her and about how I felt about her, progressing and ever deepening as the times and the number of poems went on..this being the 7th one where I risked her letting me in at last, or walking away in fear still of being hurt once again.
Background by myself
Art link Googled and long lost
Trumpet Player: http://jimmyo9.deviantart.com/art/The-young-trumpet-player-42975499
Form: Quatrain
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Comments
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oooh this is breathtaking, and i dont even like rhyming poems. i love the idea of it, the metaphor of jherico. i adore the heartfelt love in it, this is really gorgeous, thank you.
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thank you so much for the vist an for the wonderful comment,
Evan
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This is an amazing piece. Several love poems seem to have a physical aspect to them, and their similarity to each other makes them exhausting to read after a while. This poem, however, contained a unique metaphor by comparing your determination for romance to Jericho, and the fact that you’re willing to ‘break down the walls’ bit by bit shows that the love is on a deeper, non-lustful level. I loved the last stanza with the image of the trumpet. Thank you for sharing; this was a beautiful poem.
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My deepest apologies for missing this coment from so log ago no especially ne tht is so wonderful. thak you so very much for yoopur visit and for grcing this page with such comment,
Evan
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Yes quite obviously my finest work as sen above. Thanks again for th ewonderful comment,
Evan
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Wow. Simply beautiful. She is a lucky woman. This poem is masterful. The imagery, how simple a simple play of words can change you. I really appreciate you entering and good luck in the contest.
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thank you so very much for the wonderful comment you have graced this work with,'
Evan
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WOW!! you certainly have a buttload of trophies for this poem and i can certainly see why. this poem is absolutely AMAZING!! i mean wow!! the metaphors, and imagery, there's so much in this poem, it really leaves me speechless! thanks for the entry!!
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WOW! What a wonderful comment left with this BG of mine. And you did ask in option #4 for the poems you had won the most trophies on...lol. Thank you again for such praise given this work, truly appreciated,
Evan
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BEAUTIFUL
*hug*
Evan, this poem is so beautiful my friend, The story told was clear and tugged at the heart of the reader, I can well imagine that a lot of the readers would be able to relate to your written words.So many people are so very affraid to voice their feelings in fear of being turned away.I think the reason why your poem has recieved many a trophy, is because the story told was true.Now curiosity has me.... what did she do after you beared your soul?
Take care dear friend and many beautiful blessings to you.
Your friend in poetry,
~Angel~
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Sorry about missin this comment on this work. Sometimes that happens when multpile noyes come in at the same time. Thanks so much for sy=uch a wonderful coment. ASs of yet I ha not "beared my soul". Complicated story but i think it is about time. There are a few others written for her that some she has yet to see and they are:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3587608
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3626466
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3626466
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3598812
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3592474
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3589110
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3655534
And those are the ones...the seven (really 8 , so ya, I cheated). She's seen about half of them, and the rest are being held in reserve sort of (can you say chicken?...lol), but for obvious reasons. She has been married twice before and each time was hurt badly in both marriages, so she is very reluctant about starting a new one, opening her heart to another man. I know deep inside that she wants to, wants to let me in and carry this thing further, but still those walls have yet to fall though many a crack has been formed and the morter is crumbling. She want me to come out this some and spend a week together which will be nice, for we have yet to meet in personShe is such a beautifuk woma, looks just like Julia Ormond if you know who that is, th eowman that played in Legends of the fall, Fisrt Knight among others and as beautiful inside as she isoutside. As tehe time draws nearer for thr trip to Michigan, the rest of the ones she has yet to se will be revealed, with Jericho being he final one in hopes hat those walls will come tumbling down. Quite a special lady. And I hate it when men treat women like that..so sad for she is as I said such a beautiful person inside and out.
And please no comments, not panning for points, just wanted to show the 7 (8) that was mentioned in the poem and let you see them.
Thanks again for the wonderful comment,
Evan
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awwe cute, i like being able to picture this being read,and i can, great job, great write..
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Thanks so much for the visit and for the nice comment on this work,
Evan
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Ok.. this was just so amazing!! And strange thing is.. I am that girl.. well in a matter of speaking..lol..My past haunts my future when it comes to guys and stuff.. I've built walls and everything else under the sun, so I wont get hurt again.. this was really expressive in how much you didn't give up.. Thank you so much for sharing this..
Angel
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Well now you've seen the other side of me, other than the Bgs I do that is. I think we all build ghose walls around our hearts at different times in our lives, such as the one lady this referred to. But you know wgt? I think if someone loves you enough, wnts you enough, they will find a way to bring down those walls I I did with this. I do hope your walls have a crack or two in them to allow someone to do so. Thanks again,
Evan
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i read this before hun and I must say, it keeps getting better!
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What an amazing, loving write. Much deserving of all the trophies. This has the touch of a tender, patient man. Lovely! Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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Thanks so much for the nice comment on this work,
Evan
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What a beautiful love poem!!! This is just amazing and the background (Did you make it?) is stunning!!! Congrats on all the cups you've won. They are very well deserved.
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thank you for your visit and for such a wonderful comment. And yes I made the background also out of 3 different pictures and it couldnt fit any better. I does get kind of embarrassing at times entering it in contests as some people get a bit upset considering all the trophies it's won...but when people run a contest and they ask for your BEST PREWRITE, what are you sposed to do. Anywany, thanksagain,
Evan
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This is just about the sweetest concept for a love poem I've ever seen. It flowed wonderfully, rhyming never seemed forced, idea was clever, and ending left me a bit misty eyed. In short, I adored it. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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Thanks so much for the nice comment left with this work. When one's work leaves one misty eyed, thatis one of the greatest of compliments. Thanks again,
Evan
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This is so so sweet
I really liked it! great job and good luck it the comp!
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Well hello. See I can write as well as make nice BGS too. Thank you fro stopping nd for the nice comment on this work,
Evan
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My goodness - did you have to take out a loan to buy a great big trophy case for all your shinny? lol - but I can see why, I was excited by the title, and you didn't dissapoint. It is for certain an unusual concept for a poem, and you did the idea justice with a well delivered poem. Thank you for your entry into my contest, I really enjoyed reading this one!
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Lol.....well it does get kinda embarrassing at times and sometimes prevents trophies also as people see them all and sy he's got enough on this. But contests kep asking for your best so this is my best. Thank you for topping and for such as wonderful comment on this work, truly appreciated,
Evan
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Wow this was just such a beautiful love poem. That's all I can say, left me breathless. This poem is well deserved of the many trophies won. Thanks for entering & best of luck
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Wow such a beautiful comment..lol. Thanks so much for the wonderful comment , truly appreciated,
Evan
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very, very pretty and heart-filled poem
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Thank you so much for the nice comment,
Evan
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I am dismayed to see that this poem has been entered in 11 contests running at the same time as mine. This may effect your placement in my contest.
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Thank you for the gold awarded this entry. Obviously i a quite proud of this poem written for a real life lady and real life experience. And when one see a a new contest saying Give me your best or absolute best what would you do? This is what I consider my best poem. personally I do think there should be a time limit on how long you van submit prewrites...like 6 months, or 3 months etc etc which would solve the problem. There are somw wonderful commnts on these pages and like any work of art one does, the artist likes to have it shared, read by others. I dont do it for the trophies..i do it to share with others this write,
Thanks again,
Evan
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Congratulations on the previous trophies you have deservingly won. I enjoyed this, the rhyme and rhythm kept things moving to a more upbeat tempo, considering this poem is about love. The analogy you've penned about Jericho is quite clever. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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Probably good, I quit reading although, seems like I'm reading some one else's love poems and I see it's already received the attention it deserves. Thanks for entering though. You can enter something else if you want.(please do)
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Congratulations for winning so many shiny trophy's with this piece of art! I am sure you are very proud of this write, and so you should be. Good luck in future competitions I am sure it will win you many more trophy's.
All the best,
~T.S~
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So beautiful.... I happen to love the story of Jericho, and this is a wonderful way t use it in a poem. Absolutely wonderfully done!
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Thanks so much for the visit and for the wonderful comment on this work,
Evan
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OH MY GOD!!! this was amazing...
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Thank you for such a wonderful comment,
Evan
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Very awesome write...thanks for entering...please, however tell me in your notes what form you wrote this in
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Thanks for responding and letting me know
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Wow. I really like this piece! It has such wonderful imagery and such a great flow. The rhyming works really well and I like how you separated the last line from the rest of that last stanza because it made that last line really powerful. I also like how you actually told the story of Jericho and then related it to the situation you were talking about all in the same poem. This is a truly powerful piece. The title is original and I like how you used an event to come up with inspiration and related it to the story told in the poem. Great job and good luck in the contest!
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A heratfelt poignant confession that is maybe long overdue but the honesty it portrays is worth a thousand words.
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Thanks for stopping in and for the nice comment on this work,
Evan
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My o my you have won so many trophies with this and rightly so! I didn't see the background for what it was until I finished the poem. The trumpeters echo came forth with the heart and then I saw the walls and the people and how fitting it was for this poem. I am captivated by the hope, faith and love you express and even more by the unique way you have done so. You surely have a gift for passion and thought.
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Thank you so much for stopping in and for the wonderful comment you have graced this page with and by your words, it works as it should as teh BG shouldnt detract from the poem and only enhance it and not overwhelm it and it seems as it does. Thanks again,
Evan
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Wow! I'm totally amazed by this. I can see why it won so many times. It's sublime! The poem and background are amazing and I haven't seen anything like it. Very original and unique.
Good luck in the remaining contests you've entered this in.
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Thanks so much for taking the time to stop in and visit this work and for the wonderful comments you have graced this work with. Always appreciated,
Evan
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Well thank you for such a wonder ful comment. So glad you enjoyed it,
Evan
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Wonderful poem with spot on images and sublime design.
What else can I say but superb!
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Thank you for such a wonderful comment on this work and also for running this contest. This was written back in Nov and I hadn't really gotten into working with graphics and simply had a picture and so so tiled BG and I wonder now how some of those HM and bronzes won would have been with this Bg. Thanks so much again for both the comment and the contest,
Evan
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This is wonderful, but damned hard to read, I would suggest either a different background or font color... thank you for sharing your favorite with me, best of luck in the contest.
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Just a note to let you know the background has been changed for the better on Jericho,
Evan
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oh...my...god....I would melt...if I ever got anything like that written to me....I mean a puddle at their feet that is one the most heart felt poems I have ever read...and it kinda reminds me of a situation two of my friends are in...
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Thank you so much for asuch a fabulous comment on this work. which is truly appreciated and so glad you enjoyed it,
Evan
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This is simply amazing!
I love it.
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Thank you so much for the visit and for the wonderful comment,
Evsn
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Well you've certainly earned all those awards with this poem for sure!!! The flow is constent to the very last line, and yet the last line is able to stand out the most... I loved the rhyme scheme and your choice of topic/scheme. This was a very different poem from the others I'd read and I just want to thank you for entering this into the contest and giving me a chance to read it!! Grand writing here... it deserves a gold. The only reason I may not choose your piece for MY contest is that it IS a prewrite, but I shall definately consider... ^_^
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Thanks so much for teh visit and for the golden comments left with this work. You know..it's comments like thts that are worth more than all the trophies and such...to know that yoy brought someone pleasure in what you have penned. I did think that prewrites were ok, but could be wrong I guess. Anyway...thanks again,
Evan
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This is a truly beautiful poem. I love how heartfelt it is, and you did a good job of rhyming, but it didn't seem forced. Very, very well done.
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comment you have graced this page with, truly appreciated,
Evan
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what a treat this is to read i loved it i am not a fan of rhyme but i can find no fault in this poem. it read wonderfully to the finalist list this goes and i wish you much luck from there
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Thanks so much again for the kind comment and for adding this work to the finalist list,
Evan
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Amazing write here. These emotions are so powerful, it leaves me longing for a love like this! Thank you for entering my contest, and good luck.
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Thaks again for such a nice comment you have graced this page and work with, truly appreciated as is the silver given it,
Evan
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Wow, you've won a lot of trophies with this one. However, it is worthy of them. This is a very interesting and original poem. I like the use of "Jericho" and the way you related your love to it. Thanks for entering.
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Thank you so muich for the nice comments on this work. As you aid it is quite different as love poems go using the walls of Jericho as the theme and reference to one building walls around one's heart and anothe tying to bring down those walls and enter that heart.
Thanks again,
Evan
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This is really sweet. I love the rhyme and I know how it is to fall for someone and not to expect it. It's beautiful being in love, there's no feeling quite like it. Then there's no feeling like heartbreak either. I love the way you ended this write, it just sums it all up very nicely.
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Thanks so much for the wonderful comment left with this work about the poem and the ending also. Yes love is grand,
Evan
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WOW i really do like this, its amazing. One day i hope to be this good at writing xx
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thanks so much for the nice comment left with "Jericho". So glad you liked it,
Evan
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NICE :)
"So I've written you 7 poems,
in my effort to let you know
and slowly wear away those walls you've built,
as in the story of Jericho,
where the people marched for 7 days
in their effort to breach those walls
and when on the 7th day the trumpets sound,
the fortification falls."
Were amazing. Also, the last line, putting it two empty lines in between actually accomplished making it seem like a hesitant thing you were saying, or that it had been hesitant up until then...very very well written evan
Thanks for entering in my contest, and good luck
Hope all is well
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congrats on all the trophies! i really liked the imagery of this piece and you have expressed your self beautifully in this poem.
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Thanks so much for teh wonderful comments on this work and for visiting this page,
Evan
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hey Gramps this is a great job... Now am I wrong but didn't they get into Jericho because of a woman? I am pretty sure they did!
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Hey GD..hope your New Year is going well. That point about Jericho seems to evade me right now. Now gonna have to do a little Bible study today! Lol.. But will havbe to check that out...
Thanks again,
Gramps
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This is a VERY good write. I loved the references and everything about this poem is super well written. The only thing is, you've entered it into an abstract contest, and I'm not sure it falls into that genre. Thanks for entering.
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Thanks for teh nice comments on this work. Didnt really know what exactly you were looking for in terms of "abstract" as it means different things to diffreent peolpe..will have to pull up "Wictionary " and see what they say...lol,
Thanks again,
Evan
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Wow! Amazing rhyme!
This reads aloud so perfectly. I can see why it won so many trophies. It's a beautiful piece, composed very eloquently to the one you love. It just doesn't get better than that. Don
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Thanks so much for teh beautiful comment on this pen, and your comments couldnt get any better either,
Evan
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Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck!
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Thanks for teh wishes,
Evan
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Beautiful love poem- the most unique outlook on winning someone's heart that I've read in a while now. Thank you for entering
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Thank you for the nice comment left with this work,
Evan
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this poem could open up my heart it is just beautiful
i love this poem
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Thanks so much..still havent sent it..lol..
Evan
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i already commented this sooo for my contest that you entered just read my other comment and that's how i feel about this poem! good luck!
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Thamks...I'll take it for granted it was good versus sorting through 4 pages, lol. Thanks for the comments and wishes,
Evan
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Man clear some of the dead contests hehe This was a wonderful write I all ready commented before Good luck in my contest thanks for entering Evan.
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LOl....they are still ALL open or were a few days ago...or closed yet to be judged and just sitting there...
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Sorry for the delay in judging; and thank you for taking the time to enter. I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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content 7.3
vocabulary 9.5
accuracy 7.7
creativity 7
theme 7
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Thanks for the visit. does seem strange that you score originality s a 6.8 when one relates the tearing down the walls one builds around ones heart to the story of the tearing down of walls around Jericho. Have you EVER seen this correlation before. Theme and creativity would actually be pretty much the same. The comments speak for themselves...
Evan
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