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Becoming Seasons

As a flower slowly opens her first bud unto the dawn of spring,
so I am slowly becoming the woman You intended me to be.


As the warmth of summer comes to welcome all into her sun-kissed arms,
so You are teaching me to be in the darkness of the world.


As a song slowly takes it's intricate shape as the lyrics fall on the page,
I am starting to learn the song You intended me to sing.


As complex as a snowflake in the winter snow, carved by Your hand
I fall more in love with You each day.

Show me my life through Your eyes.
Your hand nurturing me into becoming seasons.

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  • leander Moderators member
    January 6, 2008

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    There is something with this poem that makes me jealous about the fact I didn't write it - lol
    The sensual and soothing voice you wrote this in, the beauty of the imagery you captured...

    I really like this a lot!
    thank you for entering the contest, I wish you the best of luck!
    Leander


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    December 23, 2007

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    that was lovely, lovely done!

    WE could feel and hear the blossoming of your innervoice.
    Keep up the great writes.
    Spydurpoet let you off a little easy on the format...most
    likely because the message was so lovely to enjoy!
    great job!
    ears2hearyou
    Kathleen : ))


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    December 17, 2007

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    I absolutely loved this. You did a great job with this. I loved the pure love you portrayed for God. So beautiful.
    Best of luck in the contests!
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    November 23, 2007

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    WOW! This was really beautiful. Awesome comparisions and lovely imagery. Your feelings come right from within; from where us writers take birth. Really liked this. Thank you for entering my contest.

    All the best,
    Charishma


  • Emile
    November 15, 2007
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    Good

    Suggestion "into becoming seasons " try "into the coming seasons ". Your feelings come through strong and straight from the heart where most good poetry is born. It paints a picture with words that make you feel them...this is hard to accomplish and you done it well. You have a talent and should write as much as you can to exercise your skills.

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