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Him

 

 

 

He sounds like an angel
at night.
Each snore means
he's saving a child
in some foreign state.
Each breath he gives
loudly so another can
receive it.

He acts like the moon,
showing an eye like a 

yellow dagger
on nights when clouds
are fidgety in the sky.
Then he shines flouride white
at full capacity,
fortifying even
cratered flaws
with smiling arches.

When I see him
after a while,
it's like going
to church once a week.
Feeling the sermon
lift me from tile
to alter to cross,
in a steady up-heaving
of spirit or sprite.
He is in my bones
those tendered moments.
I allow them
to carry me in His absence.

When he cries
he is the ashes
in a fireplace
something passionate
climbing to it's highest
peak before disbaring
into the crate.
Longing for the warmth
he exalts from
bright raptures that a dead log
can no longer provide.

When he laughs
he is the supreme judge
and I am on the stand
for my ineptitude
of humor.
I pose and pretend
to be his jester
but I know
that it is an inner justice
that keeps him laughing
down Life's Lane.
He has an innocent peace
that lets this Judge
sleep while I lay awake
a criminal counting
her days in a dim cell.

He can laugh for me

letting my drama roll

off him, sweat over

wet retardant skin.

He looks like an angel in the morning,
crying silent tears onto me
praying I will stay with him
just one more day.
If he only knew I prayed the same.

 

 

 

 

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  • Midnight Rose14
    March 2, 2008
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    awesome poem!!!!!!


  • Ali - Pie
    December 16, 2007
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    beautiful poem, i loved it!


  • ellipsist
    November 30, 2007

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    I love the comparisons and the use of simile and the likening of things to other things in this poem... I like that you utilized all of these things instead of using adjectives... very very well done indeed... very clever treatment of the prompt... you read into it correctly!


  • zochit2me gold member
    November 21, 2007

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    This speaks of longing to be loved and yet knowing that you are at the same time. That last stanza is absolutely perfect as an ending. Great metaphors and imagery flow from this and keeps the reader reading until the final stanza...
    Especially love these parts-

    When he laughs
    he is the supreme judge
    and I am on the stand
    for my ineptitude
    of humor.
    I pose and pretend
    to be his jester
    but I know
    that it is an inner justice
    that keeps him laughing
    down Life's Lane.

    I guess just one question though-
    Why capital Life's Lane?
    Just curious.

    By far the best one of yours I have read in a while.

    Becky


  • cupcakecultx33
    November 17, 2007
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    Absolutely beautiful. I love it


  • tomisb
    November 16, 2007

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    this has got to be the most stunning phatasmagorical, magical, eloborate theater of the absurd piece I have read from you. It works, every line. It carries me through it as thought cascades through words and tumbles into my recesses, leaves me panting for air as I struggle to swallow faster. Fat, delicous, far too many calories. I will never be excised.
    Love, Tom B.


  • ellipsist
    November 15, 2007
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    this is definitely what I would consider atypical of description, so yes, this qualifies as what I am looking for!

    thank you for the entry, it appears we are off to a good start!

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