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Sprawled over human stained sheets,
we bleed our conviction into bed coils.
When we lifted the blankets,
the scent rose like uncorking
a bottle of twenty year old wine.

It was midday,
the sun dust betrayed us
leaving smudges on the coffee table,
the oak tanned in a nudity
our sins would never allow.

If there was nothing here for him
except eggs and a cold shower
he wouldn't be so nervous,
fumbling his parts into clothing
that didn't seem to fit anymore.
I realized he'd come out of this a new person.
Reborn under a figure eight neon light,
gracing the sand paper linen
by the forty watt night lamp.

Kissing the places of me
he missed in squandering,
like reminiscing cake's frosting
attempting to reincarnate
the delicacy of the dessert itself,
barely recognizing the static
fuming on the T.V. screen.

They said he was a typical man,
that he was just another scribble
on the paper that God drew
and couldn't erase right away.

Am I the other woman?
Does his heart patter all the faster in her arms?
Does he not know how to handle himself in front of her?
Is their love as fresh and enticing
as a peach ripe enough
but not yet picked from the tree?

Everyone is the other woman
or man,
because there was always
a first then the rest followed
like separate branches
trailing off a tree.

We can love that other man
like we love that millionth sunset
that our eyes finally understand
the magnitude of our dependency
on this star.
We can love that other woman
like we love our second child.

He takes his time in leaving me
but I feel that I am leaving him,
because I hesitate on asking him to stay.

I knew that all he wanted was
to tell that other woman
this time he'd remain away.

 

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  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    January 11, 2008

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    Fascinating....

    you take so many emotions and combine them in a masterpiece of words.
    I love the ending stanza.
    You always end your poems so perfectly, tying them up in a neat package.


  • ellipsist
    November 27, 2007

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    whoa! far more in depth than I expected... well done! you seem to have tackled this, to have explored it from all angles... very real - I know no better it feels as though written by one who's actually been there...


  • tinuelena
    November 27, 2007

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    Love it... but this poem of yours

    http://allpoetry.com/poem/3436586

    is already slated for publication.

    If you have something you like better, send it to me and we'll switch them up.

    Elizabeth


  • Cannonsfire
    November 25, 2007

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    Brilliant, the imagery and metaphor in this simply danced off the page into my eyes. It captures a thought so very many of us have gone through and yet we still wonder?? Love, C


  • cutekitten789
    November 21, 2007

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    wow... this makes me sad... you brought forth a lot of emotion...and thats not so easy anymore...good job on thepoem...the last verse is my favorite

  • vacant lot
    November 20, 2007

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    Reborn under a figure eight neon light, that was a great line. I clicked on this thinking contemporary poems were short, but I obviously got that mixed up. This was worth it though. I think it inspired me to start painting again, with that imagery.
    (sorry I edited this. My spelling got dyslexic.)

  • michaeline
    November 20, 2007

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    You are a very talanted desciptive writer.You put us into the scences as well as the feelings that were felt.You also showed what the other person is going through with they're expectations of what the outcome is.I wish I could do half as good as you do in getting my thoughts and prospectives down on paper.


  • Prison of Lyme
    November 20, 2007

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    very nice piece

    Good luck in the contest!

    Poirsbaby


  • Mykeee
    November 20, 2007

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    Another awesome piece Greatness. I always believe and still do believe that who ever you encounter. Whether good or bad, A part of you is shared within them down to the subatomic level that can effect you. But intimacy reaches in to the mind. Rest with a place that I try to get rid of.

    You showed how that little time in space, moment can live with you forever. Intimacy is the ultimate scar.. Whether being the first or the last night. Power piece, and great metaphors throughout ~ Peace ~ Mikeeee


  • cupcakecultx33
    November 17, 2007
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    Excellent! I love it however sad at the end, it was AMAZING!


  • JohnnyD gold member
    November 15, 2007

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    Alex,

    Oh nutter, this was simply superb! excellent work all the way through..some what a combination of drug dependency and rehash of sex, love and loneliness and the fact that many times women can inadvertantly be enablers for men. Works the same for women as well, but men, hell they're suckers for it every time, again and again and again. But the funny thing is, I always assumed I could leave any woman, they're basically all the same correct? well, almost, but there comes a point you meet one who infuses herself so deeply into your inner self that she becomes part of you, regardless of your possible protests. And if you try and leave, you discover you'd leave too much of yourself behind, and the human body can't sustain itself less three pints of blood.



    Gander


    • alexandrathegreat
      November 16, 2007
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      I know what you mean it is the same way with women towards men. Now that I am with Jamey and have devoted so much of myself to him I can't imagine just picking up and leaving without leaving a part of myself. Thank you, Lenny glad you liked it.


  • Grimoire
    November 15, 2007

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    I really love these lines:

    ~Kissing the places of me
    he missed in squandering,
    like reminiscing cake's frosting
    attempting to reincarnate
    the delicacy of the dessert itself,
    barely recognizing the static
    fuming on the T.V. screen.~

    from that stanza on I sensed: a biblical reference, and the 'original sin' implication. Also , the different levels/kinds of Love referred to. More meaning, and clarity would come from better defining the particulars of the poem where interpretation is difficult.

    Altogether, it has sporadic moments of brilliance, and is solid for the most part.


  • karabi
    November 15, 2007

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    EXCELLENT

    A lovely poem on love making in suggestions through skillfully handled language and imageries.
    'When we lifted the blankets,
    the scent rose like uncorking
    a bottle of twenty year old wine.' these are the lines I liked most. A wonderful poem.


  • Lioness160
    November 14, 2007
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    Amazing

    Sad and hearbreaking in the end, but it was heartmoving. You have talent dear poet.

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