The light crescent moon
cuts like a reaper's sickle-
and tears the night sky
Author notes
Written directly from observation.
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OMG!!!!!
haiku is my favorite type of poetry in the world!!!! this one is simple yet the imagery is complex. i can totally see the bright white cresent moon priecing through the dark night sky.....i agree with "rainbowgirl" i wanna see what you saw that night, it sounds beautiful and haunting at the same time. this poem is very artistic in a way...
sachiro k
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wow, this is a great haiku! i only wish i had a photo of what you observed! well done!
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Very original idea!!! I would have never thougth of the moon like that. Your observation must of been striking!
This haiku is very interesting. It could use some work... You know, more discriptive adjectives and all that. Otherwise, a very captivating poem.
Thankyou for this amazingly awesome read(and the amazing awesome points...
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V
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This is an interesting concept. I like the simile you have chosen. It is difficult to make a haiku stand out and although this is good I feel your last line doesn't have enough impact - a different word choice for 'dark' perhaps would improve this. Like the write. Keep it up. Amber x x x
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Perfect haiku, and the imagery is outstanding. I like the imagery of the reaper's sickle. A well-crafted poem. Great job.
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Wow this is a deep and dark haiku, love the imagery in this piece, you have painted quite the picture here
Karen
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