I want to meet you within the pallid glare of the disco,
I want to dance small circles about you, so you know
that I can revolve around you, if you like,
as the plays of green, red and pink chrysanthemums
take waltzes across our unsure faces.
I want to wear my hair loose and wavy, not tied
and let it fall in shy cascades across my shoulders and face.
I want to wear that short salmon pink strapless dress,
that flutters about my thin legs, dancing to the beat
of the synthesized lullabyes.
I want to do my face with no make up at all,
[save a bit of glitter]
because all the glitter and vinyl will reflect hypnotically
against the silver, multi-faceted ball of light
that I'll take your hand under,
reckless hips and bodies gyrating;
and dance.
Author notes
by Androgyneric
- For Everyone Who Is Known As Different group list • next in list
A contest entry
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Sounds like fun to me
A very good write here and I love to dance myself to disco in my workouts
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Oh really? Cool! I love disco music..!
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WOW - this is rich in imagery and texture! I love this poem, because I can so easily visualize everything occuring. Beautiful!
Thanks for entering! Good luck!
M a r l u x i a
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Very cute. The way you described everything gave me a very pretty picture. Thank you!
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OMG!
OMG sweetie this is perfect and i love it! coult not be better! love ya! ciao! -
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Thanks so much for commenting, sweet heart!
Sorry I can't see you anymore...when do you usually get on YIM?
.:All The Best:.
Andro
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Woo....that's some good stuff!
I love this.. and like veryone else on here...
I WANNA DANCE WITH YOUZZ!
*puppy face*
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You have just painted such a vivid picture that I want to ask you to dance.Twirl around like grade school kids at the graduation. Nice wording and vocabulary.
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great use of lauage...you paint a beautiful picture for the readers
makes me want to get up and start dancing!
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Thank you! Excuse the slow response...
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I wanna dance with you!
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Sure, okay!
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This was so hot. Beautifully written Andro.
Guin
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Thank you very much!
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a very creative write that has vivid imigary, a song of love and yet to me it has a rather cold feel to it too as though you are not a part of what is going on but a spectator awating a reaction.
good work, very enjoyable
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Thanks! It was written about a dance...it ended badly, but it was enjoyable nonetheless.
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Like the Guns and Roses song, this "took me away to that special place"
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Ah, how insightful, I didn't think of that... at the time I was listening to Iron Maiden, "Rainmaker"...so I don't know...
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Fantastic! Your use of language never cease to amaze me.
<3 Jojo -
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Thanks, hon!
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This is great! Such excellent imagery
throughout this one. Wonderful work here
and thanks a lot for sharing it. Keep
it up!
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Thank you!
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Excellent visual I feltlike I was right there dancing.
This stanza is excellent I loved it
I want to do my face with no make up at all,
[save a bit of glitter]
because all the glitter and vinyl will reflect hypnotically
against the silver, multi-faceted ball of light
that I'll take your hand under,
reckless hips and bodies gyrating;
and dance.
. Rewarded 6
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Thank you for your comment! That's my favorite stanza too.
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Great Visual!
I could hear the music.... -
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Thanks!
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A Dream
This sounds like a dream I once had (or maybe it was just a bad trip) except in the dream there was a mosh pit in the disco and everyone was bleeding sunflower seeds. I really like "dancing to the beat of the synthesized lullabies". I never really thought of it that way, that's pretty cool.
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Thank you very much for commenting!
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