Wasting time, precious time
Pain and suffering part of this rhyme
Our world is falling apart
we take everything lightly
nothing to heart
Poverty is amongst us
Most dont notice
some are too busy with lust
What happened to times when we could trust everyone
Suspicious was no one.
Now times up we have no time to change the past
Our worlds shadow has already been cast
Author notes
Notsotorturedartist
A contest entry
- PRE-WRITES! ROUNDS CONTEST!!! by Luminescence.
525 points, ended March 23, 2008, 176 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
just tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a very true poem... Very nicely done... I like the title... a lot.
Title- 10
Diction- 8
Syntax- 7
Wowness factor- 9
total- 34... getting a lot better.
Thank you so much for entering and participating in my contest and good luck,
~lumin
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