She stands, a horse with legs taut and proud
And her eyes are an opera,
The clashing and rising of war voices
Marble eyes in rubber casing.
She is perfectly how
Hope stands in battle.
I bought a horse with a tail like a cliff,
Blown, fine, proud, tall;
Stalked.
And I would have bought you
But your hair was lavender.
And I would have bought you, twilight
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Comments
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I love the opera eyes part! Great job-
Vivien
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Judge Says
This is adorable. The word choice was amazing. But at the end, the lines "And I would have bought you
But your hair was lavender.
And I would have bought you, twilight " Didn't really finish it off..The balance shifted a bit. But I really do love the description.
Good luck in the contest! -
G'Day Tam ♥
"And her eyes are an opera"
What a gorgeous line
Such a lovely write ... interesting and quirky
Stay safe
~Amanda
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