You put that bullet in your head
It's never been the same
I used to cry on your shoulder
But now your gone
I see you in my dreams
Every once in a while
And sometimes I think of you
I've gotten over you
Going away
But friend I still miss you
I'll always miss you
My friend
Think of where you could have been
My friend
But now your rotting in the ground
Cold and wet and...
Full of holes
I see you in my dreams
Every once in a while
And sometimes I think of you
I've gotten over you
Going away
But friend I still miss you
Holes that wont go away
Are covering your body
If I could dig you up today
And bring you back to life
What would you say my friend
What would you say
I see you in my dreams
Every once in a while
And sometimes I think of you
I've gotten over you
Going away
But friend I still miss you
What would you do my friend
If I could dig you up
What would you do my friend
If we could go back in time
Would you let me down again!
I guess I'll never know
Why the good die young
A contest entry
- Write something decent by Clockwork.
375 points, ended January 3, 2008, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Sad write here
Its never good to take ones life for any reason for nothing in this world could ever make me do this nothing
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I liked it, but I agree with Clockwork... sometimes a piece can be too personal to the writer, discouraging the reader which can make it a bit awkward. I suggest when writing about something so personal, that you create a situation that would cause the reader to relate, thus letting them get into the piece as much as you did while writing it.
Cheers,
Liv -
Too personal for me to get this. A reader wants to feel engaged, and doesn't want to hear whining. If I spoke about my father's death, then I would take another method besides telling my reader how much I missed him.
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