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The Butterfly

I came across a butterfly one day
and it lit upon my nose.
And proceeded to look at me crossed eyed
and tell me all its woes.

He told me of the bumblebee
who chased him through the field
and the spider that scared him
and the ant that he had killed.

He told me about the bug
he had never before seen.
How big it was and
looking real mean. 

And now that he had rested here
and got it all out
he felt better now
he just wanted to pout. 

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  • cricketjeff gold member
    December 12, 2007

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    Thank-you for your entry, this was a great contest and your poem added to that. Please enter as many of the later rounds as you feel able, we'd love to have you.
    Jeff and Sue


  • Oktobere Sahnge
    December 8, 2007

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    This is cute

    The flow was slightly awkward
    But I liked the humor best
    I'd have to say that editing
    Would be the road to test!


  • mommyof2
    December 4, 2007

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    A simple lil' ditty
    of a butterfly's bad day,
    I'll bet he was wishing
    he'd stayed in bed that day

    Cute write for a child!


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    November 17, 2007

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    haha, nice! A very fun read. The thought of a crosseyed butterfly on your nose set me up for a fun ride as I read this. Well done.
    Rory


  • artis
    November 16, 2007
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    hah,I love this, I remember when I was in a butterfly atrium, where thousands of them flew free, in multi-colored splendor, so many landed on me, my nose, my clothes, a commune with nature's finest, in a pause from their lofty objectives, great write...Ar


  • Tarja
    November 14, 2007
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    Thank you for entering this fresh write... however I can't really say that I enjoyed this all that much. There wasn't much imagery... and I think the rhyming was a little forced and the poem itself was just too short for me to really get into it. Sorry, but again thank you for taking the time to enter.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    November 14, 2007
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    Welcome To AllPoetry

    LOL This is adorable!! And so much like human males Good luck in the contest. I am glad to see you exploring the site. AP is pleased to have you here. If you have any questions, please just ask one of the Greeters online. We are here to assist you

    JeannieD

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