Thick frost
clings to rooftops
while black feline observes
graceless mouse tinkering with trash
filled with dainty delights and old preserves
that a plump maidservant prepared
as mouse nibbles, cat nears
crimson blood sprays
Thick frost
Author notes
Just wanted to see if I could do one.
Rictameter.
How true is this poem?
Comments
1 - 5 of 5
-
bravo
Ouch! but very nicely and so very deftly done... a fine poem throughout... bravo... bravo... bravo...
-
wow. nice! i liked it. .... kinda like a really short story... lol u know wat it reminded me of,tom and jerry for sum rsn... only jerry never gets caught oh and the maidservant would be that one with millions and millions of petticoats underneath lmao.... sigh i miss being a kid. lol.
-
I think you are on to something here kiddo. I love your style.
-
nice work u did fine. Has great imagery to.
-
This was rather gross, but I think the flow and wording was really good, though. I think you have a very descriptive side to you and that's a very good thing, Jenny.
Keep up the great work, Jenny. I look forward to many more of your poems and future stuff. So far, you are really good and you just seem to improve to me.
Adding your comment:
1 - 5 of 5
