Treacherous terrain upon which I walk:
unforgiving in its persistent intentions,
leading me into one lesson after another.
Believing in the conspiracy of the stars,
I stumble recklessly, cursing my choices.
My desire for peace overwhelms everything
as I scream out to God:
begging for deliverance from all that is evil.
The silence is deafening,
the answer lost to my fierce expectations.
With a battered will,
I continue my journey
feeling abandoned by all that is known of love and life.
So lonely I step,
one foot in front of the other
with no direction in mind.
The journey seemingly endless
as I tackle the mountains that lay out before me
as giant heaps of trials and tribulations.
My feelings of bitter contempt
grow with in my thunderous heart.
Again I call out to God.
“Why God?
Why must I continue with sores on my feet and pain in my back?”
“Why do you refuse to deliver me from what I cannot endure?”
Still, silence grows as I search outside myself
for the words I long to hear.
Continuing to walk the path seen,
I am forced to endure yet another of life’s monstrous mountains.
I approach unwilling, tired and worn...
I fear I cannot make it
to yet another summit of grand proportions
and I crumble to the cold ground and wait on death.
Yet death does not come.
Still I sit,
quietly,
as I ponder the surroundings,
looking back down the trail from which I came,
I am suddenly amazed at my abilities.
Realization creeps slowly into my being
smothering the fierce expectations
that once stood strong,
leading me roughly down life’s path.
I stand and turn
toward the mountain to which I had cried defeat,
my lungs expand: full,
giving me the strength to conquer whatever may lie ahead.
I hear God as He praises my accomplishments.
Looking toward the heavens,
tears born of love stream down my face
as I thank God for His patience.
The answers sought were within.
Now I walk a smooth and gentle path,
allowing God to direct me during my journey.
Humbled,
my realization continues to grow,
becoming enlightened as I hear,
clearly now,
the answers blessed to me.
Author notes
I started this as something different but before I realized I was in a completly different direction than where I had intended to be with this write. LOL.
I was inspired by a contest, "Keeper of the Storms"
this is about being thankful for what you've been through and the journey that has made you who you are today.
For me life has become about learning lessons and finding beauty in pain, for it too has a valuable message.
A contest entry
- Keeper of the Storms..image prompt -freewrites welcome! by ears2hearyou.
1000 points, ended November 20, 2007, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Inner feeling on life by Li snuffles.
430 points, ended December 16, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I liked this
You are growing done forget to water the seeds of wisdom that only god can give
great way to express to one who is fearful and claims r
that they can't. Is seen inside your struggle one who was beat and defeated and put into the test just goes to show whether fast or slow in the end you did your best
Take care
kim
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read this and to comment.
I am always flattered when a poet enjoys and relates to what I write.
Take Care and Thank You
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wow! thank you for sharing this lovely piece
I love how you write about how life is like an endless walk.. many people can feel like this.. then there are times in your life when you realise "i can do this"
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wow,wow, wow!
Powerful, and moving! great piece, and your inner strength showed thru in the end! great message!
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Thank you so much!
I am pleased to know you liked it.
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INCREDIBLE...
This write moved me in a strangely wonderful way. I was intending on logging off...then, I couldn't stop reading this piece. I found it ranged from sad to awe-inspiring. I realize it was for a contest AND it seems clear that it was much more than that for you. Your form, your style here is good. It had in it, raw emotion and so much realness. The pain and introspection radiating through the screen. I love how (life is funny like this) at the last moment, when you were certain:
“Why God?
Why must I continue with sores on my feet and pain in my back?”
“Why do you refuse to deliver me from what I cannot endure?”
Then it hit you: you WERE enduring and learning and growing. NOT lessons or situations you would likely have chosen for yourself; but you gained immense insight (it appears) along that 'peril-filled' path, huh? Wow...you got me with this one. I'm truly moved. Thank you very much for entering it in the contest and whether you 'win' or 'lose' it, you've won a fan who respects this piece.
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I am so glad you like it! And thank you so much for your kind comments.
I so appreicate when people read what I write as we all do.
And to have a poet such as yourself say such kind and wonderful things about something I wrote is great!
Thank You so much for taking the time to read this very long write, hehehe.
I am actually surprised people like it, this was a a very trying piece to write.
Again Thank you so much~
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Wow. Congratulations on your gold trophy, it is well deserved. Beautiful write.
Write on.
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Wow. Congratulations on your gold trophy, it is well deserved. Beautiful write.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Thank you so much for your help with this!
You have helped to make it into a piece that is easily read and understood.
Again thank you so much, you are a very kind and considerate poet to help someone whom you didn't know.
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Perhaps this should be added before or after your final stanza!
For me life has become about learning lessons and finding beauty in pain, for it too has a valuable message.
perhaps the above should be added before or as another
final stanza, the impact would really pull it all
together ADD even more impact as we journey with you.
Just for your consideration.
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very nice piece
My fav: Still, silence grows as I search outside myself for the words I long to hear.
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very nice piece
I am more spiritual not so religious but I believe in god. I have chronic pain and I often ask him the same things. "why do I hurt so much all the time!?" Did I do something that made someone mad? I know I didn't but at the time I do tend to feel like I am being picked on!LOL!
Good luck in the contest, I think you'll do just fine.
poirsbaby
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I too suffer from chronic pain, I have trouble with my bones
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So I know how you feel.
Thank you for reading and commenting on this and I am sorry it took me so long to get back to you.
Blessings to you and yours!
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Like the winds and storm
about this stormkeeper you wrote...and we felt swept away
with you as your poetry spoke of what has been taught to
you and what you are still journeying through! I can
only imagine what beautiful illustration and story
she-the keeper of storms is reading about your precious
life...and perhaps that is why she walks so boldly
with a faint smile upon her lips, perhaps it is an
inspiration smile!
Thankyou for the bold spirit it took to unleash this
write from your heart!!!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )))
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They say what doesen't break you makes you stronger but who wants to find out ? Great write , Storm
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This is absolutely beautiful!!
I completely related to this in every way. In the past I have cried out wondering why so much has happened and the insurmountable odds have seemed stacked against me... I have even wished for death. And then slowly I've become aware that I have passed through the trial and a wonderful feeling of peace and inner strength has filled my being. Isn't it amazing what the human spirit can cope with?
I can't tell you how much this piece touched me... as I read it I thought of your trials, and my own and am thankful that we are both still standing!
Amazing write! x
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Well Done
This is truly a write about the long road through lifes pains and hurts and mountains, you have been tempered by the fire of loss and pain, and have become stronger, this is truly a spiritual write, and a life lesson, blessings with hugs John
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