the tree
a metaphor,
as are its fallen leaves
in subtle shadow
of eventide
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you (must) know i always read with poetry in mind ... if i can think or see or know something to suggest - i do ...
for me, your poetry often is what i think they mean by 'pure' ... this is gorgeous ... i love the eventide against 8th avenue ... (wish i knew why) ... >>> Gina -
Nice
May I borrow this? Maybe I could use it-it's much better then what I could write.lol
joe
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sometimes few words can reveal more than a chapter
when showing life itself!
well done!
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I don't get it.
Why did you decide to make those two stanzas? Or, could you explain what it is that contains so much from this so little an amount of writing? Or is it simple? -
Well, I really thought this poem of yours was the one to beat, Al. Such a classy poem this is and so much better than the winning one (not that hers was bad - this one was just better). This is poetry.
~ Nicolette
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thanks
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in subtle shadow
of eventide
Breathtaking, sighs
Peace and many blessings
~A~
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lovely
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a brief blink
of poetry...
the best kind.
lane
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Gorgeous...
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Classic
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Nicely written. Something to think about.
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The material world is a continuous echo of itself. Everything becomes a metaphor, but in doing so does it lose its own being? Are we in fact narcassistic because we do not pause and see that sometimes a tree is just a tree and we are mostly a construct?
Peace & Light, Tom B.
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OMG. How awesome... and this is sure to win you 14000 points and a gold shinie.
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Very nice ...
and I particularly like the vocabularly. Eventide is a damned good word and a particularly strong way to end the poem.
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such an old word to me
middle english?
my grandma used to say it sometimes
class
you have it
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Yep! Fourteen words, alright!
I like this poem, A.J.! "as are its fallen leaves"! Great write!!!
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lovely... a genteel flow, especially ending with "eventide"
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Beautiful...
Seems everyone loves leaf poetry
Myself included especially well written leaf poetry.
It's nice to see you here.
Becky
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Lovely penning.
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"in subtle shadow
of eventide"
A grand presentation of brevity & beauty, my Friend. Autumn is my favorite season, 'specially 'cause of the trees changing colors so impressively. 'xcept today, the wind can't decide whether to blow east or west or both. 
Good luck in the contest, Scribe. 
Wanda
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changing colors...
not a complete mouthful, AJ, but a perfect summary of a stripping tree in its season of harmonious blend...
Oh, and your new MG disc is in the mail and on its way... ~ Ed
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Very good write. It seemed metaphorical, like the process of death and life and how even though the leaves fall off the tree in the autumn in the Spring they grow back. Good luck in the contest.
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it's just so good to see your name pop up on the list here.. i'm just so excited
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I agree with Nicolette~ leaf poetry at it's finest.
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you're going to give our little friend a tough time. this is priceless!
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Beautiful, succinct leaf-poetry here... I love autumn - I call it the season of leaf poetry... and you wrote it beautifully.
~ Nicolette
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just simply lovely
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beautiful
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How well this captures, motion, time, and so much more, in those few words.
Through life and death, the circle, and everything seen in between.
You do so much with so little that it amazes me.
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you are gifted with so few words.
i aspire to be able to put them together so well. sometimes i think i get close, but it's never quite as strong as this.
apparently .. i'm a tree.
I wonder, when the wind blows, why don't i feel my leaves blowing off? (sorry ..random thoughts there, lol)
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simple and poignant. ill give it another look later.
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