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Stealth

For so long I only wanted you to belong to me,
To gaze at you from afar and soak up your ecstasy,
To run the risk of getting caught by another,
Just to get a glimpse of your smile.

How was I to know about your secret,
When you never wore your ring..?

Your luring icy cold eyes and sensual smile,

With your curvy shaped bum and submissive charm.

 

That charismatic chuckle and admirable accent,

Tender touch and luscious lips,

So impossible not to notice whenever you saunter past,

Sultry stares that were so misleading to me.

 

The chilling blue eyes that made my core run cold,

That offering of such a heated thrill that followed,

I fell for it and took your bate, 

Such a fool was I to think that you were single!

 

To reveal unto me that you had another woman,

And two children also, that which really tore me to pieces,

I never stop thinking about you,

How could I when you have eyes like you do?!

 

Your smile will always stay apart of my soul,

And image of your stunning blue eyes,

Will always remind me of that warmth we once shared,

I will always love and have such real memory of you...

 

Author notes

I called this write 'Stealth' because it was always a secret, which was so painful because we could never be open about our feelings or go out as a couple...

Let me know what you think xxx


Contest by joleahe - quote 7 "I love him so much. but i hate myself"


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  • She Stole My Voice
    September 6, 2008
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    Interesting piece, needless to say.
    Thank you for entering and good luck. ♥


    -rainbow.


  • Blooming Poet
    February 8, 2008

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    Beautiful love poem. I can feel yyour longing and all the emotions that go with it. this is an amazing poem.


  • Hecate616
    January 23, 2008

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    oh wow... thats pretty depressing.
    I am very sorry if this is true.

    Best of luck in the contest!


  • Pureisolation
    January 23, 2008

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    thank you for sharing this poem with me. I really liked reading your poem. I love how i could feel so much of the emotion you have for this guy who mislead you. ALso might i add i love this line, "Your luring icy cold eyes and sensual smile, With your curvy shaped bum" the curvey shaped bum really stuck out because the poem doesnt state much about his phyical looks other then his eyes and smile, then bam talking about his butt! i loved it...thanks for sharing


  • Jade-
    January 21, 2008

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    Awwww, this is very sweet, sad, and touching. I could only imagine how you must feel! It's a very emotional poem and I really enjoyed it. Sorry for what you went through [asuming this is true]

    Thanks for entering my contest, and the best of luck to you!

    [x]


  • Ladybug
    January 16, 2008
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    this is a heart-breaker.
    beautiful metaphor and smooth rythym.

    thanks for the entry

    Tamara


  • Darkend
    December 7, 2007

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    Beautiful

    I love the flow of this...and the little bit of obsession mixed in. I truly believe this is a dark desire of love from afar and forbidden passion. Well done and best of luck.


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    December 6, 2007
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    Wow. I cannot even begin to imagine how betrayed and soiled I'd feel after having been lied to in this manner. If he's out of your life now, be thankful, for he's poison, and cannot be trusted. You've done well expressing the conflict of falling in love with someone and finding it all based on a lie. Thanks so much for entering my contest!


    • Passionate Phoenix
      December 7, 2007
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      well whilst I didn't know he was married, we still loved each other deeply, and he was ok to carry on with it, but I wasn't...I wanted to do the right thing, and so I walked away. I wrote this based on it. thanks for your comment xx


  • lexy23
    November 14, 2007

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    this is a beautiful piece, i admit that i scan read it, mainly because i thought it was going to include some cliche but on the whole what i saw didn't seem unoriginal.

    love the bit about the "never wearing your ring" part.
    It moved me a little,
    especially as i am engaged now to an amazing man and he is so special to me.

    To love someone that much and have to keep it a secret must have been heartbreaking, containing all that love and hiding it away? impossible.

    Thanks for sharing your poem.

    Lexy xx


    • Passionate Phoenix
      November 14, 2007
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      it is Lexy, incredibly painful, imagine if you and your partner could never hold hands in public, nor even kiss each other at the exact moment you want to...it is a truly heartbreaking experience to go through...

      thanks for your comment xx


    • plainoljoe
      November 14, 2007
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      there is now and is yet to be any ring. too many times people put the cart before the horse. Pardon the old cliche but in this case, it fits

      Jow

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